Question

【題目】【廣州市2015年初中畢業(yè)生學(xué)業(yè)考試英語】書面表達(dá)（共1題，滿分15分） 你校將開設(shè)一些特色課程，學(xué)生可根據(jù)興趣進(jìn)行選擇。請根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容提示為學(xué)校英文網(wǎng)頁寫一篇短文，介紹這些課程、提出你建議增設(shè)的課程并說明理由。

Students in our school are free to choose some special courses according to their interest. …

注意：1. 參考詞匯：模型制作 model making

2. 詞數(shù)80左右（文章開頭已給出，不計入詞數(shù)）；

3. 不得透露學(xué)校、姓名等任何個人信息，否則不予評分。

Answer 1

【答案】

Students in our school are free to choose some special courses according to their interest. These courses will help students relax themselves after school. There are many courses for them to choose, such as English drama, football, or model making. Here is more information.

If you want to improve your oral English, English drama may be the first choice. It is a good chance to practice not only oral English, but also performing skills. If you are interested in football, take the football course. It is good for your physical health. Besides, you can learn more about teamwork. What about model making? You will be amazed by the science world and become interested in it.

For my part, a painting course can be added, because students like drawing so much. I hope these courses would be helpful and each student would enjoy a bright and colorful school life here!

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文，需要我們來介紹學(xué)校即將開設(shè)的一些特色課程，如足球、英語戲團(tuán)、模型制作等，還需要我們建議一門課程。題目中給出了這些課程的一些活動的內(nèi)容及特色，我們需要用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來，第四項課程需要我們發(fā)揮想象力，自己來說明課程的活動內(nèi)容和目的。通過分析可知，這篇短文我們應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第二人稱you來敘述。寫作時，要注意表達(dá)合乎英語的規(guī)范，注意語句之間的連接，盡量使用一些好的詞匯、句型和短語，增強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力，使文章意思更加連貫，表達(dá)更加流暢。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。短文中作者按照題目的要求給我們介紹了學(xué)校即將開設(shè)的三個特色課程的活動內(nèi)容，又發(fā)揮想象力補(bǔ)充了第四個課程painting course,內(nèi)容完整，要點(diǎn)全面，語句通順，符合題目要求。短文中作者使用了正確的時態(tài)和人稱，句式表達(dá)符合英語的規(guī)范。作者還使用了豐富的句型和句式，如here are many courses for them to choose, such as English drama, football, or model making、It is a good chance to practice not only oral English, but also performing skills.、Besides, you can learn more about teamwork、For my part, a painting course can be added, because students like drawing so much等。這些句型的使用從整體上提高了作文的檔次，顯示了作者較高的寫作能力。