Question

【題目】你在與筆友Neil信件交往多年，了解到了他以下一些信息，請根據(jù)下表提示要點(diǎn)以“My friend Neil”為題寫一篇100詞左右的文章向你的俱樂部成員介紹他的情況。（文章開頭已給，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。）

基本情況	40多歲，妻子2年前死于癌癥，至今仍單身。
興趣愛好	最喜歡Jackie Chan飾演的電影，……（寫一個(gè)原因）。
	很有繪畫天賦，以致每次畫畫時(shí)倘佯在色彩的世界里。
往事經(jīng)歷	曾參加游戲節(jié)目獲大獎(jiǎng)，當(dāng)時(shí)……（心情）。
	上月接到好友Sarah的求助短信，協(xié)助警方成功地……（自己發(fā)揮一點(diǎn)）。
愿望理想	希望能邂逅一個(gè)充滿愛心的女子，并與之相愛結(jié)婚； 雖然很喜歡表演，但寧愿做一名世界聞名的導(dǎo)演。

My pen friend Neil

Hello, everyone! Neil is my pen friend. We have been penfriends for a long time. Now let me tell you something about him.

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Answer 1

【答案】

My pen friend Neil

Hello, everyone! Neil is my pen friend. We have been penfriends for a long time. Now let me tell you something about him.

He’s in his forties. His wife died cancer 2 years ago, but he is still single now. Neil likes the films Jackie Chan has acted in because they successfully join humour and exciting action together, not only for his success in action films, but also for his efforts in charity work. He has such a real gift for painting that he enjoys himself in the world of colors whenever every time he paints.

He once took part in a game show and won a big prize. He was too excited to say a word. Last month he received a message from his good friend Sarah for help and he succeeded in helping/successfully helped the police catch the thief.

He hopes to meet a lady with a heart full of love and fall in love with each other and at last marry her. Although he likes acting very much, he’d rather be a world-famous director.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)所給信息，來介紹一下自己的筆友Neil。題目以表格的方式給出了提示。這些信息包括了他的基本情況、興趣愛好、往事經(jīng)歷以及愿望理想等。寫作時(shí)，我們可以根據(jù)需要將這些信息進(jìn)行重新整理和安排，使文章的意思銜接更自然。而且關(guān)于介紹人物時(shí)所使用的詞匯和句型，最好用比較熟悉的，所以將平時(shí)的積累發(fā)揮出來就可以。當(dāng)然我們要盡量使用一些好的句型和連詞，使文章上下文意思連貫，更出彩。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇非常優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者按照題目的要求，給我們介紹了自己的筆友Neil，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，要點(diǎn)全面。而且作者在寫作時(shí)，并不是完全按照題目中給出的順序，逐句翻譯的，而是將這些信息進(jìn)行了整合，讓意思關(guān)聯(lián)緊密的放在一起表達(dá)，這一點(diǎn)很好。短文中的語言合乎英語的表達(dá)規(guī)范，而且作者還使用了一些較好的句式，增強(qiáng)了文章的連貫性。如合成詞penfriends、動(dòng)詞短語He once took part in a game show and won a big prize.、介詞短語He’s in his forties.、連詞not only for his success in action films, but also for his efforts in charity work等。