Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)。

假如星期天你和朋友一起去仁愛農(nóng)場(chǎng)（Ren’ai Farm）去野餐，請(qǐng)對(duì)當(dāng)時(shí)的情況展開合理的想象，以David的身份給Mary寫一封信，寫一篇70詞左右的短文。（注意書信格式）

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mary,

How is it going? I hope you are fine. I want to tell to something about myself.

On Sunday, my friends and I went to Ren’ai Farm to have a picnic. We met at eight in the morning and went there by bike. It took us about one hour to get there. The farm was very big and there were a lot of animals such as sheep, pigs, geese and so on. We had a picnic on the grass. We took our lunch there. We had some bread, beef, orange juice and some fruits. When we ate, we could see many trees and small hills. It was very beautiful. We enjoyed ourselves. Though we were tired, we were very happy.

Best wishes.

Yours sincerely,

David

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以David的身份，給Mary寫一封信，給她介紹你周日和朋友們?nèi)ト蕫坜r(nóng)場(chǎng)野餐的事情。題目中并沒有規(guī)定我們要寫什么內(nèi)容，因此具體的情況需要我們自己展開想象，這對(duì)于學(xué)生們來說是比較困難的，在文中，學(xué)生們要合理想象野餐的情景，要有內(nèi)容，也要符合題目的要求。如我們可以考慮寫清楚什么時(shí)候去的，怎么去的，在那里看到了什么、做了些什么等。因?yàn)檫@是描述一件已經(jīng)發(fā)生了的事情，因此這篇短文我們應(yīng)使用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)，我們要注意謂語動(dòng)詞形式的變化，尤其是不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過去式形式。寫作時(shí)，還需要使用一些較好的句型和短語，使文章的表達(dá)流暢、連貫。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者給我們描寫了他和朋友去仁愛農(nóng)場(chǎng)野餐的事情，根據(jù)題目要求，作者展開了合理的想象，使短文的內(nèi)容非常充實(shí)、完整。首先作者寫了他和朋友是什么時(shí)候、如何去農(nóng)場(chǎng)的；然后描寫了他們?cè)谀抢锼�看到的東西；重點(diǎn)寫了他們的野餐情況，最后還寫了對(duì)這次活動(dòng)的感受。其次作者使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，全文主要使用了一般過去時(shí)態(tài)，動(dòng)詞都變成他們的過去式，尤其是一些不規(guī)則的動(dòng)詞，如took, ate, had, went等。最后作文中也有一些比較好的句式，如It took us about one hour to get there、The farm was very big and there were a lot of animals such as sheep, pigs, geese and so on、When we ate, we could see many trees and small hills、We enjoyed ourselves. Though we were tired, we were very happy.等等。