Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

在八年級(jí)上學(xué)期即將結(jié)束之際，八(1)班將舉行一次主題班會(huì)，要求同學(xué)們談?wù)勥@一學(xué)期自己的收獲與變化。請(qǐng)為David準(zhǔn)備一份80詞左右的演講稿，具體內(nèi)容如下：

	過(guò)去	現(xiàn)在
學(xué)習(xí)	很少閱讀，花時(shí)間在……	讀書(shū)使我放松……
環(huán)保	浪費(fèi)水電，隨處亂拋垃圾	意識(shí)到環(huán)保的重要性，垃圾入桶
禮儀	大聲喧嘩，插隊(duì)推擠	舉止禮貌，主動(dòng)讓座
愛(ài)心	不知道如何關(guān)心他人	……
展望未來(lái)	相信自己在將來(lái)會(huì)越來(lái)越棒。

Hello, everyone. I’m David from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last term, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in many ways.

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Thanks for listening!

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, everyone. I’m David from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last term, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in many ways.

First, in the past I seldom read books. I used to spend most of my time playing computer games. Now I find it interesting to do some reading because good books help me relax after a busy day. They also open up a whole new world to me.

Second, I always forgot to turn off the tap and the power when they were not in use. Sometimes I left the tap running after I washed my hands. I always dropped litter carelessly in the park. But now I have realized the importance of protecting the environment. I always throw the litter into the rubbish bins.

Third, I was impolite before. I sometimes shouted loudly or pushed in before others in public places. Now, I can behave politely in public and I often give my seat to someone in need on the bus.

Fourth, I cared little about others. But now I offer to help my blind neighbors and donate all my pocket money to Project Hope.

I’m sure I will do better and better in Grade 9.

Thanks for listening!

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)要求寫(xiě)一片發(fā)言稿，談?wù)勥@一學(xué)期自己的收獲與變化。首先，要認(rèn)真審題，掌握來(lái)信中的信息，需要回答的問(wèn)題。然后整體把握寫(xiě)作的大致方向，謀篇布局。結(jié)合以下要點(diǎn)：學(xué)習(xí)，環(huán)保，禮儀，愛(ài)心，展望未來(lái)等四個(gè)方面。寫(xiě)作中注意上下文的過(guò)度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：本文行文流暢，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范。各種短語(yǔ)句型表達(dá)的使用非常準(zhǔn)確，固定短語(yǔ)“used to do，open up a whole new world to me，realized the importance of protecting the environment，cared little about”以及復(fù)合句“Now I find it interesting to do some reading because good books help me relax after a busy day. Now, I can behave politely in public and I often give my seat to someone in need on the bus.”的使用，豐富了文章的內(nèi)容，為文章增色不少。