Question

Eric 要寫(xiě)一封電子郵件給自己的網(wǎng)友介紹自己的家和家鄉(xiāng)。
1. 你家離市中心大約5公里，騎車(chē)只要10分鐘。那兒有個(gè)公園。你可以在公園里鍛煉，也能聞到花香，聽(tīng)到小鳥(niǎo)唱歌。.
2. 你住在有20幢高樓的居民區(qū)。你的鄰居們友好，樂(lè)于助人。他們幫助你們解決各種困難。
3. 你住在4樓，有一個(gè)大客廳，干凈的餐廳和舒適的臥室。
4. 你認(rèn)為這是一個(gè)居住的好地方。希望她能來(lái)參觀。
要求：1．語(yǔ)句通順、語(yǔ)言規(guī)范。2．書(shū)寫(xiě)，工整、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)正確。3．80詞左右。
Dear Millie,
I want to introduce my hometown to you.__________________________________________
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Yours,       
Eric

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Millie,
I want to introduce my hometown to you. My home is about 5 kilometers from the city center.It takes 10 minutes by bike. There is a park there. I can do exercise in the park. I can also smell the flowers and hear the birds sing.
There are 20 buildings in my neighborhood. My neighbors are kind and helpful. They often help us with all kinds of problems.I live on the fourth floor. There is a big sitting room, a clean kitchen and comfortable bedrooms.
I think it’s a good place to live. I hope you can come and visit it soon.
Yours,  
Eric

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，Eric給網(wǎng)友寫(xiě)電子郵件介紹他的家和家鄉(xiāng)。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)為第一，三人稱(chēng)，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如： My home is ......；There is......；My neighbors are......及I think.......等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要表達(dá)自己希望網(wǎng)友來(lái)參觀的意愿。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭介紹了自己家的位置，接下來(lái)介紹家附近的建筑和自己家的情況，最后指出自己住的是一個(gè)好地方，并希望網(wǎng)友來(lái)參觀。此處用了by bike， do exercise， hear the birds sing， help us with及 all kinds of problems等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。