Question

11．你的英國朋友Steve未經(jīng)允許在他爸爸的電腦上玩游戲?qū)е码娔X中毒，Steve心里害怕，不敢向爸爸說，因此寫信向你求助．請(qǐng)你以Diana的名義根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示給Steve寫一封回信．
提示：1．指出Steve的兩點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤；
     2．最好立即向爸爸說出實(shí)情；
     3．建議Steve幫爸爸做些事，以彌補(bǔ)過錯(cuò)．
要求：1．詞數(shù)80詞左右；
     2．短文中不得提及真實(shí)的人名和校名等信息；
     3．開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)．
Dear Steve，
Thanks for thinking of me at this time．I think you have made two mistakes．
The first one is you shouldn't play computer games without your father's pemission．The other is you made it get virus．（指出錯(cuò)誤）
What you have to do is to tell your father the truth．【高分句型】Tell him about the games and the websites you have visited．You'd better apologize to your father．（說出實(shí)情）Maybe your father would get angry with you．But you should try to calm him dowm．First，you can help him make the computer recover．If you don't know how，you can ask your father for help．Make sure to let your father know that your are sincere to solve the problem．Also，you can help him do some housework．（彌補(bǔ)錯(cuò)誤）I think he will forgive you．Everyone would make mistakes，take it easy and try your best to correct them．（安慰朋友）
Oh，and next time，play basketball with your Dad!
Best wishes，
Diana．

Answer 1

分析 本作文為書信，書信格式在題目中已提供．考生需根據(jù)所列出的提綱回信，寫作要點(diǎn)應(yīng)包括提示里的內(nèi)容．1．指出Steve的兩點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤；2．最好立即向爸爸說出實(shí)情；3．建議Steve幫爸爸做些事，以彌補(bǔ)過錯(cuò)．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第二人稱．重要短語：website（網(wǎng)站），make mistakes，get virus（中毒），tell sb the truth（告訴…實(shí)情），calm down（使…平靜），apologize to sb（向…道歉），come up with ways（想辦法），without permission（未經(jīng)同意）．

解答 Dear Steve，
Thanks for thinking of me at this time．I think you have made two mistakes．
The first one is you shouldn't play computer games without your father's pemission．The other is you made it get virus．（指出錯(cuò)誤）
What you have to do is to tell your father the truth．【高分句型】Tell him about the games and the websites you have visited．You'd better apologize to your father．（說出實(shí)情）Maybe your father would get angry with you．But you should try to calm him dowm．First，you can help him make the computer recover．If you don't know how，you can ask your father for help．Make sure to let your father know that your are sincere to solve the problem．Also，you can help him do some housework．（彌補(bǔ)錯(cuò)誤）I think he will forgive you．Everyone would make mistakes，take it easy and try your best to correct them．（安慰朋友）
Oh，and next time，play basketball with your Dad!
Best wishes，
Diana．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)需注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)，以及寫作的邏輯順序是否合理．書信類的作文如果未提供書信格式，考生在寫作時(shí)需注意書信格式．
寫作方面，考生在平時(shí)需注意積累短語和重要句型，可以根據(jù)話題來對(duì)短語進(jìn)行歸類，比如環(huán)保類題材，書信類題材，給人提供建議的議論文文體等等，這樣在考試時(shí)就能信手拈來，在考試的時(shí)間規(guī)定內(nèi)，寫出較好的文章．