Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)(共計(jì)15分)

初中生活即將結(jié)束，6月6日下午，你班的班長(zhǎng)方華組織了一次畢業(yè)聚會(huì)：話(huà)友誼、憶過(guò)去、簽名留言、拍照記念。請(qǐng)根據(jù)圖片的先后順序描述此次聚會(huì)的過(guò)程。

注意：

1.文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校的名稱(chēng)。

2.至少用兩句話(huà)描寫(xiě)每幅圖畫(huà)的內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。

3.首句已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。詞數(shù)80詞以上。

4.參考詞匯：簽名sign one’s name, 班長(zhǎng)monitor, 心形的heart-shaped

As the junior life is ending, our class decided to have a party to celebrate it. _________________________

Answer 1

【答案】

As the junior life is ending, our class decided to have a party to celebrate it.

At the beginning, we talked about friendship. It is a human instinct to make friends. When in trouble, we need friends to offer us help, support and encouragement. With success achieved, we also need friends to share our joys. Friendship is one of the greatest pleasures that we can enjoy. Everyone needs friendship. No one can sail the ocean of life single handed. We need help from and also give help to others. We can’t forget the happy time that we’ve spent with our classmates and teachers. At school, we are busy with our studies. After class, we joined some clubs at school. In this way, we’ve got more knowledge and improved our life. We learn how to face difficulties, and we also learn how to get on well with friends. Our school life is meaningful and colorful. In a word, it is unforgettable, isn’t it?

Next, everyone wrote down one of the most memorable things on the paper . And put them together to form a heart - shaped essay pattern. Then we signed our names for each other. Finally, we took a picture of a group photo in front of the teaching building. We had a wonderful time.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇看圖作文。我們首先要認(rèn)真讀圖，充分理解圖畫(huà)所表達(dá)的內(nèi)容，弄清圖中的人物在干什么，弄清圖畫(huà)背景與人物之間的聯(lián)系，弄清事情發(fā)生的經(jīng)過(guò)。其次在讀圖之后，要根據(jù)圖畫(huà)表達(dá)的主要內(nèi)容，理出表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)。列出要點(diǎn)時(shí)要注意分清主次，不能看到圖中有什么就認(rèn)為什么要寫(xiě)�？磮D作文時(shí)只描述圖畫(huà)內(nèi)容是不可取的，應(yīng)充分展開(kāi)想像使圖畫(huà)活起來(lái)。理出要點(diǎn)之后，就可以根據(jù)要點(diǎn)擬定提綱,即把整個(gè)圖畫(huà)中要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容先用一句話(huà)寫(xiě)下來(lái)。再依據(jù)已經(jīng)寫(xiě)出來(lái)的話(huà)語(yǔ)擴(kuò)寫(xiě)成一篇短文。擴(kuò)寫(xiě)時(shí)，可運(yùn)用想象適度發(fā)揮，緊扣圖畫(huà)的內(nèi)容，進(jìn)行適當(dāng)敘述，連貫通順即可。寫(xiě)好文章之后應(yīng)通讀全文進(jìn)行檢查。在檢查時(shí)，應(yīng)著重看短文是否扣住圖畫(huà)的內(nèi)容，要點(diǎn)是否有遺漏。同時(shí)，還要注意有無(wú)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，如時(shí)態(tài)、人稱(chēng)等，是否符合文體特點(diǎn)、格式等等。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：該文語(yǔ)句通順，段落清晰。不僅表達(dá)了圖畫(huà)的內(nèi)容，而且適當(dāng)發(fā)揮拓展了內(nèi)容。文章多處使用固定短語(yǔ)如In this way及句型如In a word, it is unforgettable, isn’t it?為文章增色不少。