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12．書面表達(dá)根據(jù)要求完成短文寫作，請(qǐng)將作文寫在答題卡指定位置上．
常言道"良言一句三冬暖，惡語(yǔ)傷人六月寒"．假設(shè)你是李雷，你將要參加學(xué)校舉辦的英語(yǔ)演講比賽，主題是"語(yǔ)言的力量"，請(qǐng)你寫一篇英文演講稿，內(nèi)容包括：
你的一次受老師或同學(xué)言語(yǔ)激勵(lì)的經(jīng)歷（事情的經(jīng)過以及對(duì)你的影響）；
呼吁同學(xué)們要注意自身言語(yǔ)對(duì)他人的影響．
作文要求：
1．不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱、老師和同學(xué)的真實(shí)姓名．
2．語(yǔ)句連貫，字?jǐn)?shù)80個(gè)左右．作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Ladies and gentlemen，
How will words influence others？Let me tell you one of my experiences．                                 

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
 Even when I became a middle school student，I failed to do things well．   甚至當(dāng)我成為中學(xué)生的時(shí)候，我也不能把事情做好．這是when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，當(dāng)…時(shí)候．
 高分句型二
  I tried to do everything by myself and I found that I could do things well．   我試著自己做每件事，我發(fā)現(xiàn)我能做好事情．try to do sth．試著做某事．  I found that I could do things well．是賓語(yǔ)從句，I found 是主句，that I could do things well是從句．

解答 How will words influence others？Let me tell you one of my experiences【開頭點(diǎn)明主題】．Parents are always so nervous about their children's study that they do almost everything for them．I am just one of these children．Even when I became a middle school student，I failed to do things well．【高分句型一，注意時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的使用】．I began to doubt my ability and felt very sad．Then one day my deskmate said to me，"Always trust yourself．You can surely do things well．"Encouraged by what he said，I tried to do everything by myself and I found that I could do things well．【高分句型二，注意賓語(yǔ)從句的使用】【正文部分詳細(xì)介紹自己的經(jīng)歷】
Encouraging words can really help people a lot．【結(jié)尾緊扣主題】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇寫作需注意要求中所提供的要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏．需在平時(shí)積累相關(guān)的詞匯，寫作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系．上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞．如but，so，then等．