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11．同學(xué)們，咸寧市被列為首批國家旅游標準化四個示范城市之一了．讓我們也行動起來吧！為了讓母校變得更加美好，為家鄉(xiāng)建設(shè)添磚加瓦，請同學(xué)們?yōu)樾�園建設(shè)積極建言獻策．假如你是濱海中學(xué)初三年級學(xué)生劉雨，請你寫一份建議書． （以上背景內(nèi)容無需表述）內(nèi)容要點：1、校園環(huán)境（如：植樹、種花、運動場、圖書館…）
 2、特色課程（如：舞蹈、音樂…）
3、…注意：1、文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱；詞數(shù)80左右．文章開頭、結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
2、要點齊全，語言通順，意思連貫，書寫規(guī)范，可以適當發(fā)揮．
3、提示詞：hope； organize； interestingDear Headmaster，
I am very glad to write to you．These days we are  talking about how  to make our school more beautiful．Here  are  some  of my  suggestions．First，a library with a lot of interesting books in it should be built，so that we can read in our spare time every day．Second，we expect our own dancing hall and piano room．Many of us like dancing，and some are even good at playingthe piano．Third，we dreams of having a playing-field with many flowers and green trees around．We can exercise there every day to make our body strong．Finally，I suggest teachers in our school organize more colorful after-class activities for students．
In a word，I hope our school will attract more visitors and I wish her a good future．
Thanks for your reading!
Yours sincerely，
Liu Yu．

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分析 本題是一篇提綱作文，要求是為了讓母校變得更加美好，為家鄉(xiāng)建設(shè)添磚加瓦，請同學(xué)們?yōu)樾�園建設(shè)積極建言獻策，假如你是劉雨，所以應(yīng)該以第一人稱來寫，內(nèi)容是一份建議書，所以寫作時要注意can，should等情態(tài)動詞的使用．時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．

解答 Dear Headmaster，
    I am very glad to write to you．These days we are  talking about how  to make our school more beautiful．Here are some of my suggestions．
    First，a library with a lot of interesting books in it should be built，so that we can read in our spare time every day．
Second，we expect our own dancing hall and piano room．Many of us  like dancing，and some are even good at playing the piano．Third，we dreams of having a playing-field with many flowers and green trees around．We can exercise there every day to make
our body strong．Finally，I suggest  teachers  in our school organize more colorful after-class activities for students．
    In a word，I hope our school will attract more visitors and I wish her a good future．
    Thanks for your reading!Yours sincerely，
           Liu Yu

點評 這是一篇提綱作文，寫一篇建議書，短文的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出．本作文中給出的要點比較簡略，動筆前先要圍繞這些要點組織材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點全部表達出來，不要偏離文章中心．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)和人稱，一定要契合文章要表達的主題，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，例如情態(tài)動詞的使用，同時也要注意盡可能的用一些連詞讓文章更有條理．