Question

【題目】Jim is completing a self-assessment（自我評價(jià)）form of health to find out if he is healthy.Read his results in the table below and write a letter to give him some advice on how to keep fit.

	always	often	sometimes	seldom	never
Do you sleep for less than 8 hours every night?		√
Do you have breakfast in the morning?					√
Do you have fruit every day?				√
Do you eat snacks like sweets between meals?	√
Do you do exercise for half an hour every day?					√

注意：1. 詞數(shù)90詞左右；開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

2. 表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使上下文連貫；

3. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

Dear Jim,

I’m sory to find that________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

I hope my advice will help you.

Yours,

Mike

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jim,

I’m sorry to find that you don’t have a healthy lifestyle. Here are some tips for you.

First, if you don’t have enough sleep, your body and mind won’t get a good rest. You’ll feel bad the next day. And breakfast can help you start the day well. Second, you always eat snacks between meals. It’s bad for your teeth and you get fat easily as a result. Why not have more fruit? An apple a day keeps a doctor away. Finally, it is important to take proper exercise to keep you healthy.

I hope my advice will help you.

Yours,

Mike

【解析】

本文屬于話題作文，根據(jù)吉姆的健康評價(jià)為他提一些建議。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。

亮點(diǎn)說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如get a good rest, be bad for, as a result, why not, an apple a day keeps a doctor away, keep healthy, first, second, finally以及it is important to take proper exercise中it作形式主語，真正的主語為to take proper exercise。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。