Question

11．假如你叫劉暢，你的朋友小明因為沉溺于電腦游戲，成績?nèi)找嫦陆担�作為小明的朋友，你很擔心，并決定給他寫一封e-mail，幫助他改掉這個壞習(xí)慣，好好學(xué)習(xí)．
要點提示：
（1）說明玩電腦游戲的利弊．
（2）建議小明在課余時間多參加有意義的活動．
（3）你對小明的期望．
要求：
（1）字數(shù)：80詞左右（開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，且不計入總詞數(shù)．）
 （2）文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名、校名等信息．
（3）文中必須包括提示中所規(guī)定的要點，并可適當發(fā)揮．
參考詞匯：be addicted to 沉溺于
Dear Xiao Ming，
How are you doing recently？
We take pride in that you are good at playing computer games．Computers are more and more important in our lives．Playing games on them can help us know more about computers，which is very useful for our future lives．But if you are addicted to it，it'll be quite harmful to you．It is not only bad for your health but also has bad influence to your study to spend too much time playing them．
Next you should take an active part in all kinds of activities in your free time．We all know you are a cute boy，you must do better in the study if you spend less time playing computer games．
Yours，
Liu Chang．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
①Playing games on them can help us know more about computers，②which is very useful for our future lives．玩游戲可以幫助我們了解電腦的更多東西，這對我們未來的生活是非常有用的．
①動名詞playing作主語
②which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，修飾前面整個句子．
高分句型二：
It is ①not only bad for your health but also②has bad influence to your study to ③spend too much time playing them．花太多的時間玩它們，不僅對你的健康有害，而且對你的學(xué)習(xí)也有壞的影響，
①not only…but also不但…而且…連接前后兩個對等的成分，謂語動詞遵循就近原則．
②have influence to sth對…有影響
③spend time （in）doing sth花費時間做某事

解答 Dear Xiao Ming，
           How are you doing recently？We take pride in that you are good at playing computer games．Computers are more and more important in our lives．Playing games on them can help us know more about computers，which is very useful for our future lives．【高分句型一】But if you are addicted to it，it'll be quite harmful to you．It is not only bad for your health but also has bad influence to your study to spend too much time playing them．【高分句型二】【說明玩電腦游戲的利弊】
          Next you should take an active part in all kinds of activities in your free time．【建議小明在課余時間多參加有意義的活動】We all know you are a cute boy，you must do better in the study if you spend less time playing computer games．【我對小明的期望】
Yours，
Liu Chang

點評 這是一篇提綱類作文．作文前要仔細審題，確定出寫作重點；要把握好時態(tài)和人稱；為使文章更有條理性可以分條列出計劃．為避免文章的單調(diào)和枯燥．應(yīng)該考慮運用比較高級的語法形式去讓文章增色，如定語從句的使用和名人名言等．所以平時的基礎(chǔ)一定要打牢，這樣寫起文章來才游刃有余，而不是捉襟見肘．