Question

20．書面表達(dá)：英語課上，老師向同學(xué)們介紹了2013年度"最美孝心少年"的感人事跡，你深受感動．請你用英語寫一則日記，寫出自己的感受．
內(nèi)容要點及要求：
1．表明自己將向"孝心少年"學(xué)習(xí)；
2．你將在日常生活、學(xué)習(xí)中做些什么來孝敬父母；
3．詞數(shù)：80左右．開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
提示詞（可選用）：learn from，respect，care for，do some housework，study hard
Monday，June 30                                                         Sunny
This morning，our English teacher told us some stories about"the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013"．I was deeply moved．Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring for parents．
I used to make my parents unhappy and now I feel ashamed about it．I think I should learn from them．I will help do some housework and take good care of my mum and dad when they are ill．I will try my best to study hard so that I can enter the key high school in our city．I hope I can become a filial piety youth like them．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點，動筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀要點，然后圍繞要點適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，時態(tài)較為復(fù)雜，注意時態(tài)一致問題．語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．

解答 參考范文Monday，June 30                                                        Sunny
  This morning，our English teacher told us some stories about"the most beautiful filial pietyyouth in 2013"．I was deeplymoved．Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring forparents．
  Iused to make my parents unhappy and now I feel ashamed about it．I think Ishould learn from them．I will help do some housework and take good care of mymum and dad when they are ill．I will try my best to study hard so that I canenter the key high school in our city．I hope I can become a filial piety youthlike them．

點評 這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少．如：set an example for為…樹立榜樣；used to do sth．過去常常做某事；take care of照顧；try one's best to do sth．盡力做某事；強(qiáng)調(diào)句式It is said for sb．to do sth．做某事對某人來說怎么樣等等．學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用，讓文章更出彩．