Question

13．最近你校進行了一次"說出你的煩惱（Speak out your worries）的調查活動，請根據(jù)以下內容和提示要求寫一篇英語短文，匯報調查結果并向老師和父母提出建議．
注意：1．詞數(shù)80左右；2．不得透露學校、姓名等任何個人信息

學生比例	煩惱	你的建議
50%	作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，壓力大	？
30%	父母不理解，缺乏交流
20%	活動少，體質差

Our school has made a survey---"Speak out your worries"．Here are the results．About fifty percent of the students in our school are worried about their homework．They have so much homework to do every day that they don't have enough sleep．They feel stressed very much．About thirty percent of the students think their parents can't understand them and are too strict with them （in their studies）．It's difficult for them to get along/on well with their parents．The other twenty percent of them say they are weak in health．They complain that they almost have no time for their hobbies or after-school activities．
Dear teachers，would you please give us less homework and more time to relax ourselves？Dear mom and dad，we will try/do our best to improve our studies and we want to take more exercise to stay healthy as well．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內容是匯報說出你的煩惱（Speak out your worries）的調查結果并向老師和父母提出建議．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1.50% 作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，壓力大
2.30% 父母不理解，缺乏交流
3.20% 活動少，體質差
4．提出建議
常用到的重點短語：
be worried about  擔心…
be weak in在某方面薄弱
be strict with sb"對某人嚴厲"；
get along well with"和某人合得來"；
try one's best to do sth"盡某人最大努力做某事
【高分句型】
1．They have ①so much homework②to do every day that they don't have enough sleep．
①so…that，如此…以至于…，that引導的結果狀語從句．
②動詞不定式做后置定語，修飾homework．
2．①It's difficult for them to ②get along/on well with their parents．
①it is+adj+for sb+to do sth對某人來說做某事是怎么樣的，it是形式主語，動詞不定式做真正主語．
②get along well with"和某人合得來"；
3．They complain that they almost have no time for their hobbies or after-school activities．
that引導的賓語從句，作為complain的賓語．

解答 Our school has made a survey-"Speak out your worries"．Here are the results．
About fifty percent of the students in our school are worried about their homework．They have so much homework to do every day that they don't have enough sleep．【高分句型】They feel stressed very much．（50% 作業(yè)多，睡眠不足，壓力大）About thirty percent of the students think their parents can't understand them and are too strict with them （in their studies）．It's difficult for them to get along/on well with their parents．（30% 父母不理解，缺乏交流 ）【高分句型】The other twenty percent of them say they are weak in health．They complain that they almost have no time for their hobbies or after-school activities．（20% 活動少，體質差）【高分句型】
Dear teachers，would you please give us less homework and more time to relax ourselves？Dear mom and dad，we will try/do our best to improve our studies and we want to take more exercise to stay healthy as well．（提出建議）

點評 這是一篇圖表作文．要求同學們根據(jù)圖表內容寫一份調查結果匯報，要將表格內容表述全面并根據(jù)調查結果寫出你的建議．動筆前要認真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點，并適當發(fā)揮．根據(jù)材料內容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，注意時態(tài)語時間狀語的搭配及主謂一致問題．寫作中適當使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關系．
這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少．如：be strict with sb"對某人嚴厲"；get along well with"和某人合得來"；try one's best to do sth"盡某人最大努力做某事"等等．在平時學習中牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理．