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10．2015年12月巴中爭(zhēng)創(chuàng)"全國文明城市"，舉全市人民之力大力整治不文明、不良的行為．作為一名中學(xué)生，你是否該盡一點(diǎn)綿薄之力？在日常生活中，你看到身邊有哪些不良現(xiàn)象？請(qǐng)列舉一些并就某些方面說說你的做法和想法．提示：文明城市：civilized cities；  speak loudly，cut in line，waste food，unfriendly（冷漠的），offer no help …
要求：1．參考提示語，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．語句通順，意思連貫，書寫工整；
3．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
4．詞數(shù)：不少于80詞．（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）
In our daily life，I usually see some bad behaviors around us．For example，
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I think if everyone can think more of others，we'll have a better living environment．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
①For middle school students，we should try our best to keep away from bad habits．對(duì)于中學(xué)生，我們應(yīng)該盡力遠(yuǎn)離壞習(xí)慣．句子中try one's best to do sth表示盡力做某事，keep away from 這里的意思是遠(yuǎn)離．
②I think if everyone can think more of others，we'll have a better living environment．我認(rèn)為，如果每個(gè)人都能更多地考慮別人，我們將有一個(gè)更好的生活環(huán)境．句子中think后面跟的是一個(gè)從句，這個(gè)從句由if引導(dǎo)，而if引導(dǎo)的句子，主句用一般將來時(shí)，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．

解答 In our daily life，I usually see some bad behaviors around us．（引出話題）For example，I often hear people speak and laugh loudly in public．It is too noisy．Some people cut in line while others are waiting．It makes me unhappy．And in our school dining hall，I often see students waste food．At times，people seem unfriendly and offer no help when others are in trouble．（列舉身邊不文明行為）For me，my parents are strict with me．They often tell me to behave well．So I never drop litter about．And I never draw on the desk or on the wall．I am polite to old people．（我的做法）
For middle school students，we should try our best to keep away from bad habits（高分句型）．"civilized Bazhong"will be achieved．（作為一名中學(xué)生應(yīng)該怎么做）
I think if everyone can think more of others，we'll have a better living environment（高分句型）．（發(fā)出倡議）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 此為材料作文，要仔細(xì)審題，抓住重點(diǎn)，在闡述自我保護(hù)的方法時(shí)要把所給信息條理清楚的表達(dá)出來，可使用一些表示順序的詞，使論述更明確，更有層次感．還要注意多使用一些委婉的提建議的句型，盡量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥單調(diào)．要求語句通順，語法，詞匯，時(shí)態(tài)正確，書寫規(guī)范．