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10．很多城市都正在創(chuàng)建文明城市． 文明城市的創(chuàng)建需要靠每個(gè)人的努力． 你在公共場(chǎng)所有沒(méi)有看見(jiàn)一些不文明的行為呢？請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一封倡議書(shū)，內(nèi)容包括：
1）列舉你在公共場(chǎng)所經(jīng)常見(jiàn)到的兩個(gè)不文明的行為．
2）提出文明準(zhǔn)則，至少兩條．
3）號(hào)召大家做一個(gè)文明的人．
要求：1）不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱(chēng)和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名．
2）語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右． 開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Citizens，
As we all know，our city is aiming at being a civilized one．Everybody should make an effort．
However，some people still behave badly in public．For example，some people cut in line while getting on buses or getting into cinemas．Besides，some men often smoke in non-smoking areas in public．It's really bad for other people's health．To make our city a better one，I think we should always obey the rules such as waiting in line while shopping and keep our mobile phones off during the meeting．What's more，we should never litter in public．
Let's try our best and be a polite person，no matter where we are．．
Thank you all．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是寫(xiě)一封倡議書(shū)號(hào)召大家做一個(gè)文明的人．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱(chēng)主要為第一人稱(chēng)和第三人稱(chēng)．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1）列舉你在公共場(chǎng)所經(jīng)常見(jiàn)到的兩個(gè)不文明的行為．
2）提出文明準(zhǔn)則，至少兩條．
3）號(hào)召大家做一個(gè)文明的人．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
cut in line 插隊(duì)
in public公共場(chǎng)所
be bad for對(duì)…有害
obey the rules 遵守規(guī)則
what's more 再者
try one's best to do sth 竭盡全力做某事
【高分句型】
1．①To make our city a better one，I think②we should always ③obey the rules④such as waiting in line ⑤while shopping and keep our mobile phones off during the meeting．
①動(dòng)詞不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)．
②省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為think的賓語(yǔ)．
③obey the rules 遵守規(guī)則
④such as 例如，wait in line 排隊(duì)等候
⑤while shopping省略句，完整表達(dá)while we are shopping．引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．

2．①Let's②try our best and be a polite person，③no matter where we are．
①let sb do sth 讓某人做某事
②try one's best to do sth 竭盡全力做某事
③no matter where 無(wú)論哪里，引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear Cit izens，
     As we all know，our city is aiming at being a civilized one．Everybody should make an effort．．
     However，some people still behave badly in public．For example，some people cut in line while getting on buses or getting into cinemas．Besides，some men often smoke in non-smoking areas in public．（列舉公共場(chǎng)所經(jīng)常見(jiàn)到的兩個(gè)不文明的行為）It's really bad for other people's health．To make our city a better one，I think we should always obey the rules such as waiting in line while shopping and keep our mobile phones off during the meeting．【高分句型】What's more，we should never litter in public．（提出文明準(zhǔn)則）
     Let's try our best and be a polite person，no matter where we are．【高分句型】（號(hào)召大家做一個(gè)文明的人）
Thank you all．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇作文由于提綱材料本身決定了寫(xiě)作對(duì)象、范圍、目的、體裁等，命題者的意圖往往較容易領(lǐng)悟，考生在審題上一般不會(huì)出現(xiàn)障礙．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)提示運(yùn)用相關(guān)的句型結(jié)構(gòu)靈活的展開(kāi)作文．考生需注意不要逐詞逐句地進(jìn)行翻譯，所寫(xiě)句子要符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．