Question

【題目】書面表達

Paul是你的好朋友，近幾年來他的變化很大，請根據(jù)下面表格里提供的信息

寫一篇短文，描述他五年前和現(xiàn)在的一些情況，簡要介紹他的成長變化。

要求：1. 根據(jù)表格內(nèi)容進行寫作，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；內(nèi)容具體，語句通順，書寫工整。

2. 90詞左右，短文的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

3. 文章中不能出現(xiàn)你自己的真實姓名、班級和學(xué)校。

Changes

in Paul’s Life

Paul is my good friend. He has changed a lot in the past five years.

Answer 1

【答案】

Paul is my good friend. He has changed a lot in the past five years. He used to be short, have short hair . He used to be a little heavy. But now he is thinner and much taller, and she has long straight hair. He used to be quiet and lazy. He liked surfing the Internet. But now he is active and humorous. He likes reading and playing basketball. He used to watch TV a lot and chat with others on the Internet. But now he also likes traveling, playing sports and listening to music. He used to eat junk food, but now he cooks himself at home. He likes vegetables and fruit.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文給出了寫作的主題，在寫作時要構(gòu)思好文章的結(jié)構(gòu)，敘事清晰，注意要點要齊全。句子要完整，表達準(zhǔn)確，注意時態(tài)的變化和主謂一致。文中可適當(dāng)使用一些連接詞來加強文章的邏輯性。

寫作亮點：這篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰完整，表達準(zhǔn)確流利，要點齊全，今夕事件對比中時態(tài)運用恰當(dāng)。文中有許多實用的表達方式，句式豐富，連詞and與but等運用恰當(dāng)；還使用一些有用的表達used to, chat with, listen to等。