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13．請(qǐng)以《家人的愛(ài)》為題寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文，文中須包括以
下要點(diǎn)：
1．當(dāng)我剛剛睜開(kāi)雙眼時(shí)，看到的是爸媽的笑臉；
2．當(dāng)我剛剛學(xué)走路時(shí)，聽(tīng)到的是媽媽鼓勵(lì)的聲音．
3．我還記得生病時(shí)，是爸爸深夜帶我去醫(yī)院；
4．但是，很多時(shí)候，我對(duì)他們并不了解．
5．通過(guò)十幾年的了解，我知道他們也和我一樣有很多自己的愛(ài)好和煩惱．
6．我在家人的關(guān)愛(ài)下一天天成長(zhǎng)起來(lái)．
注意：1．可適當(dāng)增減內(nèi)容，使短文意思完整、連貫；
2．書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范，文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和校名．
Family  Love
When I just opened my eyes，I could see my mom and dad's smilling face．When I just learned to walk，Icould hear mother's encourage voice．I still remember when I was ill，daddy took me to the hospital deep in the night．
But，most of the time，I didn't understand them．Through more than 10 years of understanding，I know that they also have many hobbies and troubles，just like us．
I am growing up day by day with my family love．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容為以"Family  Love"為題敘述來(lái)自父母的愛(ài)．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．其次考生可從六方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：1．當(dāng)我剛剛睜開(kāi)雙眼時(shí)，看到的是爸媽的笑臉；
2．當(dāng)我剛剛學(xué)走路時(shí)，聽(tīng)到的是媽媽鼓勵(lì)的聲音．
3．我還記得生病時(shí)，是爸爸深夜帶我去醫(yī)院；
4．但是，很多時(shí)候，我對(duì)他們并不了解．
5．通過(guò)十幾年的了解，我知道他們也和我一樣有很多自己的愛(ài)好和煩惱．
6．我在家人的關(guān)愛(ài)下一天天成長(zhǎng)起來(lái)．
常用到的重點(diǎn)句型和短語(yǔ)：
smilling face笑臉
learn to do sth學(xué)著做某事
take sb to sp帶某人去某地
most of the time大部分時(shí)間
day by day一天天地
參考句子：
I still remember when I was ill，daddy took me to the hospital deep in the night．
本句中含有作為remember的賓語(yǔ)從句以及when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的運(yùn)用．
Through more than 10 years of understanding，I know that they also have many hobbies and troubles，just like us．
本句含有that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，以及through短語(yǔ)作為狀語(yǔ)．

解答 When I just opened my eyes，I could see my mom and dad's smilling face．（爸媽的笑臉）When I just learned to walk，I could hear mother's encourage voice．（媽媽的鼓勵(lì)）I still remember when I was ill，daddy took me to the hospital deep in the night．（生病時(shí)）（高分句型）
   But，most of the time，I didn't understand them．（轉(zhuǎn)折，承接上下文）Through more than 10 years of understanding，I know that they also have many hobbies and troubles，just like us．（了解父母）（高分句型）
   I am growing up day by day with my family love．（家人的愛(ài)伴著我的成長(zhǎng)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇作文由于提綱材料本身決定了寫(xiě)作對(duì)象、范圍、目的、體裁等，命題者的意圖往往較容易領(lǐng)悟，考生在審題上一般不會(huì)出現(xiàn)障礙．可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)提示運(yùn)用相關(guān)的句型結(jié)構(gòu)靈活的展開(kāi)作文．所寫(xiě)句子要符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．