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【題目】書面表達(dá)

研究表明音樂(lè)對(duì)人們的情緒有著重要的影響，因此人們用不同的音樂(lè)來(lái)調(diào)節(jié)心情。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表提示內(nèi)容，寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文。

聽(tīng)音樂(lè)前的情緒狀態(tài)	適用音樂(lè)	聽(tīng)音樂(lè)后的心境
壓力大，過(guò)分焦慮	流行音樂(lè)	放松
沉迷電腦游戲，興奮過(guò)度	鄉(xiāng)村音樂(lè)	平靜
困倦，疲勞	搖滾音樂(lè)	振奮
孤獨(dú)，悲傷	（考生自似）	（考生自擬）

注意：1．詞數(shù)80左右，開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；2．內(nèi)容必須包括上表中的要點(diǎn)；3．條理清楚，語(yǔ)句連貫；4．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的地名、校名和人名等信息。

（參考詞匯：搖滾音樂(lè)rock music）

A research has shown that music has an important effect on one’s moods.

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

Research has shown that music has an important effect on one’s moods. So people use different kinds of music to change moods. If you feel stressed and worry a lot, you can listen to pop music. After you listen to it, you will feel relaxed. Some of the students are crazy about computer games and feel over excited, they can listen to country music. After listening to it, they will feel calm and peaceful. Some people feel tired and sleepy, they can listen to rock music. After they listen to it, they will feel excited. Sometimes I feel lonely and sad, I often listen to disco music, after I listen to it, I feel happy again. Music is so wonderful. I like it very much.

another possible version:

Research has shown that music has an important effect on one’s moods. So we can change our moods by listening to different kinds of music. If you have too much pressure, you can listen to pop music to make you relaxed. People who enjoy playing computer games are too excited so they can make themselves calm by listening to the country music. And if you feel tired and sleepy, you can listen to the rock music so that you will feel excited again. When I feel lonely and sad, I often listen to soft music which always cheers me up. It makes me happy again.

【解析】

試題分析：本題要求寫一篇音樂(lè)的議論文。本題所給材料較為詳細(xì)，故動(dòng)筆前先要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容。寫作中主要將各種情緒狀態(tài)及適合的音樂(lè)介紹清楚。結(jié)合語(yǔ)境可知本文主要是用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述，人稱問(wèn)題較為復(fù)雜，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫作中注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞；為豐富文章的文采，可以多用一些復(fù)合句。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫好后反復(fù)讀幾遍，適當(dāng)修改。

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