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根據(jù)下面提供的材料寫一篇短文．

在冬季的一天，李雷來你家玩，你們談?wù)撈鹆颂鞖猓�并把我國的冬季同澳大利亞這時的天氣狀況進行了對比．(要求：80詞左右)

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學生：習作： A Winter Day 　　Last Sunday was a fine day. My friend Li Lei came to my house. He were a(X1) thick clothes, He heard from his penfriend in Australia yesterday. Li Lei said. “The weather of Australia is different from China(X2). It is summer new. It rains big(X3). How cold it is now in China! The day is getting short and short(X4) Look! It's snowing! A timely snow promises a good harvest”. “Oh, yes, what are the farmers doing now?” I asked. “They are very busy, getting ready for next year(X5), aren't they?” 　　We talked everything about winter. Through the window, I could see it snowing quietly. 　　剖析：1．clothes是復(fù)數(shù)形式，前面不能用a或an． 　　2．只有相同類型的事物才能進行比較，這里所比較的是“天氣”，所以應(yīng)把China改為that of China，其中that是替代詞，它代替前面的weather． 　　3．形容雨、雪下得大，不能用形容詞big，而應(yīng)該用副詞heavily修飾動詞rain． 　　4．表示“越來越……”應(yīng)該用“比較級+and+比較級”形式，所以要改為“shorter and shorter”． 　　5．next year為“明年”，the next year為“第二年”，此處是泛指第二年，應(yīng)加上定冠詞the． 　　總評：行文流暢，語言簡練，運用語言描寫，從側(cè)面向讀者展示了一幅冬天的畫卷，同時也介紹了澳洲與我國的季節(jié)反差，成功地用了“瑞雪兆豐年”的農(nóng)諺，表達了自己美好的愿望．但在某些語法方面，還有一些錯誤．