Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

請(qǐng)以“My best friend”為題，寫一篇短文來(lái)介紹你的朋友May。詞數(shù)在80字左右。要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 既是我最好的朋友又是鄰居。在八年級(jí)，比我大。

2. 又高又苗條，一張圓臉，大大的會(huì)笑的眼睛使她看起來(lái)很友善。

3. 懂禮貌，學(xué)習(xí)勤奮，樂(lè)于助人。經(jīng)常輔導(dǎo)同學(xué)功課；在公交車上讓座給需要的人。

4. 喜歡閱讀和打棒球，每周二次,放學(xué)后經(jīng)�？炭嗑毩�(xí)。

5. 長(zhǎng)大后想成為……，我相信她……。

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Answer 1

【答案】

My best friend

I have a good friend. Her name is May. She is my friend as well as my neighbour. She is in Grade 8 and she is older than me. She is tall and slim with a round face. She has two big smiling eyes and looks friendly. She is polite and works hard. She is always ready to help others. She often help her classmates with their lessons. On the bus she often gives her seat to people in need. She likes reading and playing tennis. She often practices playing tennis after class every Tuesday. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up. I believe she is sure to realize her dream.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)題目中的提示，寫一篇作文來(lái)介紹自己的朋友May，題目中給我們列出了寫作的要點(diǎn)，我們需要將這些內(nèi)容用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)。介紹人物的文章是學(xué)生們比較熟悉的，教材上或者平時(shí)的練習(xí)中都有接觸，因此寫作所需要的詞匯和句型，學(xué)生們積累比較多，寫作時(shí)會(huì)比較容易。通過(guò)分析可知，這篇作文我們應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第三人稱she來(lái)敘述，因此我們要特別注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞第三人稱單數(shù)形式的變化，正確使用be動(dòng)詞的形式�？梢詫⑾嘟�的要點(diǎn)加以歸類，使作文更加有層次，結(jié)構(gòu)更清晰。寫作時(shí)，還應(yīng)注意表達(dá)的流暢，使用一些句型和短語(yǔ)，還可以用一些連詞，使文意連貫。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文里作者給我們介紹了他的好朋友May的情況。作者寫作時(shí)主要是根據(jù)題目中提示的要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行翻譯的，這樣可以避免遺漏要點(diǎn)，但是會(huì)顯得比較沉悶，沒(méi)有變化。整篇短文里所使用的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱都很正確，尤其是注意了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞第三人稱單數(shù)形式的變化，符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)規(guī)范。短文中形容詞比較級(jí)、介詞短語(yǔ)、連詞的使用也很準(zhǔn)確，表現(xiàn)出來(lái)扎實(shí)的基本功。作文里較好的句型有She is in Grade 8 and she is older than me.、She has two big smiling eyes and looks friendly.、She is always ready to help others、She often practices playing tennis after class every Tuesday.、he wants to be a teacher when she grows up等。