Question

【題目】 書面表達(dá)。

假設(shè)你是李明，請給英國的筆友約翰寫一封電子郵件，介紹去年夏天你和家人在海邊游玩的情景。內(nèi)容包括：1. 去目的地交通方式。

2. 天氣情況，你和你家人干些什么以及其他游客的活動(dòng)情況。

3. 最興奮的活動(dòng)是什么，玩得開心嗎?

作文要求：條理清晰，意思連貫，詞句通順。70個(gè)詞左右。

Dear John,

Yours,

Li Ming

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear John,

I’d like to tell you something about my vacation. I went to the beach with my family last year. We got up early in the morning and took a bus to the beach. The weather was fine, and we enjoy the sunshine by the sea. There were many people there. Some people played football and volleyball, and some rode the bikes, and some flew the kites, and so on. The most exciting thing is swimming. My father taught me how to swim. We had a great time there. At last, we went back home in the evening. [

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份，給筆友John寫信，內(nèi)容是關(guān)于去年夏天去海邊游玩的事情。題目中給出了具體的寫作內(nèi)容，主要包括三個(gè)方面：一是你是如何去的；二是那里的天氣情況以及在那里多了些什么，這是文章的中心；最后是你最興奮的活動(dòng)是什么。通過分析可知，這篇作文記敘的是去年的事情，因此應(yīng)使用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)來寫，每句話中注意動(dòng)詞應(yīng)使用過去式形式，特別要注意不規(guī)則動(dòng)詞的過去式形式變化。寫作時(shí)要包括題目規(guī)定的所有要點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容要完整、充實(shí)。還應(yīng)注意使用符合英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣的短語和句式，不要逐字翻譯。注意使用過度短語和句型，還有一些連接詞，使短文的意思連貫，表達(dá)流暢。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文，短文里作者按照題目的要求，記敘了自己去年夏天去海邊游玩的事情。短文的內(nèi)容完整，包含了題目規(guī)定的所有內(nèi)容；短文使用了正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱，注意了一般過去時(shí)態(tài)動(dòng)詞形式的變化，非常準(zhǔn)確，語法也很規(guī)范。短文中還使用了一些較好的句型，如We got up early in the morning and took a bus to the beach、There were many people there. 、Some people played football and volleyball, and some rode the bikes, and some flew the kites, and so on、My father taught me how to swim等。