Question

7．為感受母愛(ài)情深，弘揚(yáng)知恩圖報(bào)，某英語(yǔ)網(wǎng)站正在舉辦以"My Mother"為主題的征文活動(dòng)．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列思維導(dǎo)圖所提供的信息，寫(xiě)一篇短文，介紹你的母親和你與母親間的故事．

參考詞匯：give much to…，It's my turn to…，try my best to…
提示：
1）短文內(nèi)容須包括所給內(nèi)容，含母親曾為你所做的事和你將為母親所做的事各一件，并闡述原因；
2）請(qǐng)注意短文結(jié)構(gòu)層次、時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用和卷面整潔度；
3）詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右，短文開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
4）文中不得出現(xiàn)學(xué)校和個(gè)人的相關(guān)信息．
My  Mother
We need love．We also need to show love．The person I love most is my
mother．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"My mother"為題介紹自己的母親和你們的真情故事．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱和第三人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1介紹：年齡，工作，外貌，能力，愛(ài)好
2她為我做的事
3我將會(huì)為她做什么
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
even though即使
grow up 長(zhǎng)大
make sb+adj使某人怎么樣
like doing sth喜歡做某事
cook…for sb為某人做…
graduate from…從…畢業(yè)
【高分句型】
1．She bought ①whatever I needed for my study，②even though she didn't have much money．
①whatever無(wú)論什么．引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為buy的賓語(yǔ)．
②even though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句．
2．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．
that make her look still young是一定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞clothes，關(guān)系詞that作為定語(yǔ)從句的主語(yǔ)，不可省略．
3．①M(fèi)ost importantly，I will stay with her②when I have free time．
①M(fèi)ost importantly最重要的
②when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．（介紹）
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．【高分句型】She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（她為我做的事）
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．【高分句型】I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．【高分句型】That's what she wants most，I think．（我將會(huì)為她做什么）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題是一篇圖表作文，圖表作為書(shū)面表達(dá)的一種信息提示方式，比提綱作文線索顯得更簡(jiǎn)潔明了，寫(xiě)作時(shí)也容易區(qū)分表達(dá)，本題是介紹自己的母親，學(xué)生們有話可說(shuō)，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，要特別注意幾種情況的描述，不能逐句翻譯，同時(shí)要根據(jù)提示有效靈活的構(gòu)思，恰當(dāng)使用邏輯詞語(yǔ)，讓文章顯得有條理，不雜亂．