Question

【題目】寫作

臨近畢業(yè)，學校在學習小組內開展了初中階段自評和組評活動，假設你是Moonlight小組的組長，請根據(jù)下面表格中的信息和提示，為你的組員Tommy進行綜合素質的評價，寫一份素質報告。

Name	Tommy
Characteristics	聰明、大方（各舉1例）
Hobbies	喜歡看書，認為看書有很多好處（請列舉2個好處）
Honour	他在家?guī)椭�做家務。在學校和同學相處融洽。上學途中遵守交通規(guī)則（舉1例）。今年，學校授予了他優(yōu)秀學生獎（Award for Best Student）
Problems	面臨考試時，感到壓力很大。他沒有充足的睡眠。
Your suggestions	(根據(jù)實際情況提2點建議)…

要求：1）表達清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2）必須包括表格中所有的相關信息，并適當發(fā)揮；

3）詞數(shù)：100詞左右（開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）；

4）不得使用真實姓名、校名和地名等。

Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight. ____▲_________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight. He is clever and he is good at all his lessons. He is so generous that he shares everything with his friends.He likes reading because he thinks he can get much knowledge and learn more about the world by reading. And reading has a good effect on children’s growth. At home, he can help his parents do some housework. At school, he gets on well with his classmates. On the way to school, he obeys the traffic rules. He crosses the road when the light is green. Our school presented him with Award for Best Student this year. However, Tommy is stressed when the exam comes. And he doesn’t have enough sleep.

I think he should go over what he has learned before exams. It’s better for him to manage his time wisely so that he can have enough time to rest.

【解析】這篇作文要求我們按照表格里的內容介紹一下Tommy的情況，為Tommy寫一篇綜合素質的評價報告。在表格中有非常詳細的關于Tommy各方面的內容，我們需要用正確的英語把這些內容有條理的表達出來。表格中涉及的內容較多，寫作時要注意表達的條理性。這篇作文應主要使用第三人稱來寫。在最后要給Tommy提一些建議，這一部分應該用第一人稱。同時注意表達的準確性，尤其是表格中的第五項和第六項內容。

【亮點說明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。這篇作文內容完整，包含了表格中的所有內容，沒有遺漏要點。表達準確，注意了被動形式的使用，如He was rewarded by our school this year.。寫作時注意了條理性，使文章具有層次感，條理清楚。短文注意到了長短句的結合，并恰當?shù)氖褂昧艘恍┻B詞，使文章表達的連貫。如He is always ready to help others.、He not only likes reading detective novels but also likes watching programs about sports news.、He is good at running. He won the first place in our school sports meeting this year.等。