Question

【題目】書面表達

（2015煙臺）隨著互聯(lián)網的發(fā)展，智能手機（smart-phone）已被廣泛使用。我們身邊的“低頭族(phubber)”隨處可見。請根據(jù)圖中所示，結合表格所提供的信息,以“Refuse to be phubbers”為題寫一篇90詞左右的短文。

現(xiàn)象
弊端	影響與家人，朋友的關系（relationship）;容易因發(fā)生交通事故，不利于學習和工作。
觀點	正確利用手機；面對面交流勝過網上聊天……

要求：1. 短文須包含所有信息，語句通順、意思連貫,可適當發(fā)揮；2. 題目與開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：1. have effects on 對……有影響 2. concentrate on 聚焦于……

3. face-to-face conversation 4. make good use of

Refuse to be phubbers

With the development of the Internet, smart-phones are widely used among people. Phubbers can be seen here and there.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Refuse to be phubbers With the development of the Internet, smart-phones are widely used among people. Phubbers can be seen here and there. Some family members play with their smart –phones while eating with families instead of talking with them. It has effects on the relationship between them. Some people look at their smart-phones while walking even riding or driving. It may increase the danger of causing traffic accidents. Some children want to play with smart-phones before sleeping. It’s bad for their health and their study. In fact, face-to-face conversations are much more conventient and better than chatting on line by phone. Mobile phones are helpful and necessary tools for modern life. But we should make good use of it to be “healthy” users rather than Phubbers。

【解析】

試題分析：本文要求按圖表提示，以“Refuse to be phubbers”為題作文。短文重點是兩個方面，一是現(xiàn)象與弊端：揭示現(xiàn)代人用手機的惡習及其產生的危害；二是觀點與方式：告訴人們怎樣正確的使用手機，利用好這個現(xiàn)代的通訊工具。短文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。第三人稱或第一稱形式。

寫作亮點：短文首先結合現(xiàn)代人使用手機的現(xiàn)象，說明了人們使用手機給生活帶來的危害，接著告訴人們怎樣正確地使用好手機。條理分明，層次清楚。短文包含了提綱的所有信息，語句通順，意思連貫。文中用了while doing， instead of, rather than等等結構，給短文增色不少。