Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

學(xué)校將在下周舉行英文演講比賽，Jack的話題是 “對(duì)我影響最深的人”，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下材料，幫他組織一篇100字左右英文演講稿，介紹一下三位對(duì)他影響最深的人，并說說你的感想.

Persons	Job	Details
My mother	a teacher	1. forties; 2. full of love（至少舉一例說明）; 3. decide to donate her body after her death
Tan Dun	a composer	1. born in Hunan, China； 2. help build a bridge between the East and the West; 3. bring Chinese and Western music together;
Jackie Chan	a film star	1. nearly 100 films, join humour and exciting action together 2. win many awards; 3. spend many years doing charity work;

The persons who have influenced me most

I am happy to give a speech here. There are three persons who have influenced me most. They are my mother, Tan Dun and Jackie Chan.

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Answer 1

【答案】

The persons who have influenced me most

I am happy to give a speech here. There are three persons who have influenced me most. They are my mother, Tan Dun and Jackie Chan.

My mother is a teacher. She is in her forties. She has a heart full of love and she has donated blood many times. To my surprise, she has decided to donate her body after her death.

Tan Dun is a composer. He was born in Hunan, China. He has helped build a bridge between the East and the West. He has successfully brought Chinese and Western music together.

Jackie Chan is a film star. He has acted in nearly 100 films. In the films, he joined humour and exciting action together perfectly. He has won many awards. He is also a humanitarian. He has spent many years doing charity work. He is thought highly of by many people.

They are all my heroes. They are really worth learning from.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)所給信息，寫一篇以“對(duì)我影響最深的人”為話題的演講稿。題目給出了有關(guān)于演講稿的具體信息，我們應(yīng)用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來。這些信息影響Jack的人有他的媽媽、譚盾和成龍，還有理由。我們可以根據(jù)需要將這些信息進(jìn)行重新整理和安排，使文章的意思銜接更自然。而且這些關(guān)于介紹人物時(shí)所使用的詞匯和句型，是學(xué)生們比較熟悉的，所以將平時(shí)的積累發(fā)揮出來就可以。當(dāng)然我們要盡量使用一些好的句型和連詞，使文章上下文意思連貫，更出彩。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇非常優(yōu)秀的作文，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，要點(diǎn)全面。而且作者在寫作時(shí)，并不是完全按照題目中給出的順序，逐句翻譯的，而是將這些信息進(jìn)行了整合，讓意思關(guān)聯(lián)緊密的放在一起表達(dá)，這一點(diǎn)很好。短文中的語言合乎英語的表達(dá)規(guī)范，而且作者還使用了一些較好的句式，增強(qiáng)了文章的連貫性。如動(dòng)詞不定式she has decided to donate her body after her death.、介詞短語She is in her forties.、連詞They are my mother, Tan Dun and Jackie Chan.、定語從句There are three persons who have influenced me most.等。