Question

【題目】昨天你和朋友去南通游玩。請根據以下提示寫一篇短文，記錄本次活動并簡要談談感受。詞數70左右，已給出首句，可適當發(fā)揮。

1到達：上午9點；

2活動：乘船游濠河(the Hao River)和狼山(the Wolf Hill)、游泳、騎馬、踢球、吃午飯、唱歌、做游戲；

3返回：下午3：30。

Yesterday my friends and I went to Nantong.

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Answer 1

【答案】Yesterday my friends and I went to Nantong. When we arrived at nine, we first took a boat to visit the Hao River. We saw lots of beautiful birds there. After that, we also went swimming in the river. It was cool and comfortable. Then we came to the Wolf Hill. We rode horses and played football for about one hour. At about twelve o'clock, we had a simple lunch there. When lunch was over, we sang songs and played games. We started to go back at half past three. We had a wonderful time.

【解析】試題

這是一篇記敘文，需要記錄下本次出行的活動，準確寫出其中的各項活動。結合正確的時間表達法（at 9 o’clock in the morning等）描述動作，同時也要正確使用一般過去時，語言要連貫得體。

寫作亮點：

首先要概括文章的主題（Yesterday my friends and I went to Nantong.）讓讀者知道這是一篇游記。一些細節(jié)處的詞語可以增強文章的邏輯結構，如“first, After that, Then”等。行為動詞的過去時使用準確，時間表達法準確。有適當的增添的細節(jié)，為文章內容進行了充實，如“had a simple lunch”（吃了一頓簡便的午飯），“played football for about one hour”（踢了一個小時的足球）等，都豐富了題干要求的內容，在切題的基礎上有亮點。