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14．假如你是Li Ming，今年暑假你將作為交換生到英國(guó)姐妹學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)、生活兩周．到時(shí)候，你將作為通州學(xué)生代表用英文介紹自己的家鄉(xiāng)通州．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提供的信息，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇演講稿．
要點(diǎn)：1．通州是個(gè)美麗的現(xiàn)代化城市，離上海大約一個(gè)半小時(shí)的車程．
2．到處可見綠樹、河流和高樓．
3．街道開闊，兩邊有很多各種商店．
4．居住條件有很大改進(jìn)（improve），現(xiàn)在人們大多住在公寓里面．
5．你家的居住情況及你的感受：…（內(nèi)容請(qǐng)自擬）．
注意：1．以第一人稱口吻介紹；
2．講話稿應(yīng)包括所給要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，要求意思連貫、語(yǔ)句通順；
3．詞數(shù)：90左右，講話稿的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear all，
I am an exchange student from Tongzhou，China．I am very happy today to have the chance to introduce my hometown Tongzhou!
Tongzhou is a beautiful and modern city．It's about half an hour's ride from Shanghai to my hometown．You will see a lot of green trees，rivers and tall buildings everywhere．There are wide streets with many different shops on both sides．
Now people's living condition has improved a lot．Most people live in the flats．I live in a tall building near the bus station．My home is on the ninth floor．Although it is not big，it is very beautiful and comfortable．I like my own bedroom very much．I often listen to music in the bed．
Welcome to Tongzhou!Welcome to my home!
Thanks!

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是寫一篇演講稿介紹自己的家鄉(xiāng)通州．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱和第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．通州是個(gè)美麗的現(xiàn)代化城市，離上海大約一個(gè)半小時(shí)的車程．
2．到處可見綠樹、河流和高樓．
3．街道開闊，兩邊有很多各種商店．
4．居住條件有很大改進(jìn)（improve），現(xiàn)在人們大多住在公寓里面．
5．你家的居住情況及你的感受：…
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
there be 有
 a lot of許多
listen to 聽
from…to…從…到…
【高分句型】
1．①There are wide streets ②with many different shops on both sides．
①there be 有，表存在．
②with many different shops 做定語(yǔ)，修飾前面的streets．
2．Although it is not big，it is very beautiful and comfortable．
although表示雖然，引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear all，
I am an exchange student from Tongzhou，China．I am very happy today to have the chance to introduce my hometown Tongzhou!
Tongzhou is a beautiful and modern city．（美麗的現(xiàn)代化城市）It's about half an hour's ride from Shanghai to my hometown．（離上海大約一個(gè)半小時(shí)的車程）You will see a lot of green trees，rivers and tall buildings everywhere（到處可見綠樹、河流和高樓）．There are wide streets with many different shops on both sides．（街道開闊，兩邊有很多各種商店．）【高分句型】
Now people's living condition has improved a lot．Most people live in the flats．I live in a tall building near the bus station．My home is on the ninth floor．（居住條件有很大改進(jìn)）Although it is not big，it is very beautiful and comfortable．【高分句型】I like my own bedroom very much．I often listen to music in the bed．（你家的居住情況及你的感受）
Welcome to Tongzhou!Welcome to my home!
Thanks!

點(diǎn)評(píng) 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語(yǔ)法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會(huì)造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個(gè)提綱的要點(diǎn)．行文間要注意簡(jiǎn)化描述，用簡(jiǎn)短的語(yǔ)句代替冗長(zhǎng)的語(yǔ)句．在作文完成的時(shí)候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．