Question

【題目】【2016山東菏澤】書(shū)面表達(dá)。

假如你是李強(qiáng)，有一天在上學(xué)路上，你看到趙王河公園河岸的道路損壞嚴(yán)重，一些彩磚不見(jiàn)去向，影響人們的出行。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)給China Daily菏澤頻道寫(xiě)一封信，反映這一問(wèn)題，并提出你的看法和建議。

（一）參考詞匯：destroy毀壞；color bricks彩磚；disppear消失；repair修復(fù)；take measures采取措施；protect保護(hù)；public facilities公共設(shè)施

（二）其他要求：100字左右；開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總字?jǐn)?shù)。

Dear Editor,

I'm a high school student___________________________________________________________________

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Li Qiang

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Editor,

I’m a high school student. One day, on my way to school I found that along the river bank in Zhaowang River Park, the road was badly destroyed and some color bricks had disappeared, which would affect people’s going out. Perhaps these bricks were carried away by some people nearby and kept by themselves. I’m very sorry about that.

Since the public facilities are often destroyed like that, I suggest that our government should repair the road as soon as possible and take some measures to protect these public facilities. And as for us students, whenever we find someone destroying our public facilities, we should make efforts to stop him or her in time. Only in this way can we have a more beautiful and comfortable city to live in.

Li Qiang

【解析】

試題分析：本題要求給China Daily寫(xiě)一封信，反映看到的問(wèn)題，并提出自己的看法和建議。這是一封書(shū)信，要注意書(shū)信的基本格式，注意書(shū)信的語(yǔ)言選擇。根據(jù)短文提示，本文就從兩個(gè)方面來(lái)寫(xiě)作，一是自己在上學(xué)路上看到的情況，主要用第一人稱(chēng)，一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行表達(dá)；二是自己的建議和看法，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：本范文層次清楚，條理分明。短文分為兩部分，第一部分是寫(xiě)作者在上學(xué)路上看到了一些現(xiàn)象。本段敘述清楚，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確。用了賓語(yǔ)從句，定語(yǔ)從句等等表達(dá)形式，使得本段生動(dòng)具體。第二部分是作者的看法與建議。條理清楚，中心突出。本段使用了賓語(yǔ)從句，時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句；還準(zhǔn)確恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂昧薬s soon as, take measures, as for, make efforts, in this way等等結(jié)構(gòu)，給本段增色不少。