Question

【題目】假如你叫張蒙,班主任李老師想了解班級同學(xué)的狀況,以便有針對性地對學(xué)生進(jìn)行考前心理疏導(dǎo)。請你根據(jù)下面的內(nèi)容要求,給班主任李老師寫封e-mail,說明自己的情況,并請她給你提一些建議。內(nèi)容要求:

1.學(xué)習(xí)任務(wù)重,睡眠不足,缺少體育活動。同學(xué)間缺乏溝通和交流。

2.在家不允許看電視、上網(wǎng)、聽音樂等。

From:zhangmeng@163.com To:chlw524@sina.com Subject: problems Date: June 26

Dear Ms Li,

I'm very glad to write to you_______________________________________________________________

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Best wishes.

Zhang Meng

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Ms Li,

I'm very glad to write to you. I have a lot of troubles these days. Every day I have a lot of homework to do at school. I don't enough time to sleep. I nearly have no time to do sports. My friends and I can hardly find time to talk, or play together. When I get back home from school, I'm not allowed to watch TV, surf the Internet or listen to my favourite music. I feel worried about them. I don't know what I should do. Could you please give me some suggestions?

Best wishes.

【解析】本文屬于材料作文，給班主任李老師寫信說明自己的情況。根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定并準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容。

【亮點說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達(dá)符合英語習(xí)慣，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別適用一些亮點詞句，如trouble, have a lot of homework to do, enough time, hardly, allow to do, favorite以及worried。增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句子通順，行文連貫。