Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

以My ________為題寫(xiě)一篇60詞左右的短文。

要求：

1.補(bǔ)全題目。

2.書(shū)寫(xiě)整潔，語(yǔ)句、標(biāo)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用、單詞拼寫(xiě)正確。

3.若寫(xiě)人物文中不得出現(xiàn)真名。

Answer 1

【答案】

My friend

I have a friend. His name is Jim. He is from the USA. Now he lives in China with his family. He is 13 years old. We are in the same class. He has short hair and wears glasses. He wears a blue jacket. Blue is his favorite color. He likes Chinese very much. He also likes playing basketball. He is good at it. He often plays basketball with his classmates after school. He wants to be a basketball player when he grows up.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文是一個(gè)開(kāi)放性的作文，題目是My...，首先我們應(yīng)先補(bǔ)充好題目，我們可以介紹自己的一件東西，也可以介紹自己的朋友或是家人。補(bǔ)充完題目之后，我們開(kāi)始構(gòu)思寫(xiě)作的內(nèi)容，如果的介紹事物的，我們可以說(shuō)說(shuō)它的外貌、特征、顏色，喜歡這個(gè)事物的原因等。如果是介紹人物的，我們可以介紹這個(gè)人的姓名、年齡、外貌、興趣愛(ài)好等等。這樣的短語(yǔ)應(yīng)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，要正確使用be動(dòng)詞和其他動(dòng)詞形式，如果主語(yǔ)是第三人稱單數(shù)形式，還需要使用動(dòng)詞的第三人稱單數(shù)形式。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，還應(yīng)使用一些連詞和好的句式，使文章的表達(dá)更加連貫和流暢。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這篇作文給我們介紹的是他的朋友，這是一篇介紹人物的短文，作者主要是從姓名、年齡、國(guó)籍、外貌、喜好、夢(mèng)想等方面來(lái)介紹的。短文的內(nèi)容非常充實(shí)、完整，表達(dá)也很有秩序，有條理。短文里也使用了正確的人稱和時(shí)態(tài)，主要是第三人稱He，故謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞都用了第三人稱單數(shù)形式，符合語(yǔ)法的規(guī)范和要求。短文里也使用了一些較好的短語(yǔ)和句型，如He is from the USA. Now he lives in China with his family、He has short hair and wears glasses、He is good at it、He wants to be a basketball player when he grows up等。這些句型使文章的表達(dá)根據(jù)流暢，意思也更連貫。