Question

5．假如你叫李華，你的筆友Jenny為了使身材苗條（slim）而節(jié)食（on a diet），每天只吃少量的蔬菜和水果，最近她時(shí)常覺(jué)得頭疼、疲勞．請(qǐng)你針對(duì)她的情況用英語(yǔ)給她寫(xiě)一封90詞左右的郵件，談?wù)勀愕目捶ê徒ㄗh．請(qǐng)將答案寫(xiě)到答題紙的相應(yīng)位置上．
Dear Jenny，
I hear that you are on a diet these days to be slim                   ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文，書(shū)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容主要是對(duì)自己的筆友Jenny提出有關(guān)飲食方面的看法和建議．由于在要點(diǎn)中只給出了寫(xiě)作的大致方向，需要自己發(fā)揮的地方較多．動(dòng)筆前要圍繞要點(diǎn)組織材料，確定時(shí)態(tài)以及主要詞匯等問(wèn)題，根據(jù)題目要求可知本篇短文的時(shí)態(tài)主要是一般將來(lái)時(shí)和should的運(yùn)用，人稱主要是第二人稱，還應(yīng)注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題．寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性；盡量運(yùn)用要求中的有關(guān)短語(yǔ)句型；語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．
【高分句型】
1．you should realize that being healthy is more important than being slim．你應(yīng)該認(rèn)識(shí)到健康要比身體苗條重要的多．being healthy是動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)．
2．what's more．另外，更重要的是．一般用作插入語(yǔ)，表示遞進(jìn)的關(guān)系．
3．if you really want to be slim，you can play sports regularly every day．如果你真想苗條，你可以每天進(jìn)行有規(guī)律地運(yùn)動(dòng)．以if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，一般應(yīng)用"主將從現(xiàn)"，即主句用一般將來(lái)時(shí)，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來(lái)表示一般將來(lái)時(shí)．

解答 Dear Jenny，
I hear that you are on a diet these days to be slim． You only eat some vegetables and fruit every day，so you often have a headache and feel tired．In my opinion，you should realize that being healthy is more important than being slim．【高分句型】You must pay attention to your health．（對(duì)Jenny節(jié)食的看法）
To keep healthy，you should eat a balanced diet．You need to eat different kinds of food every day．Besides vegetables and fruit，you should also eat meat，fish，eggs and so on．What's more，【高分句型】if you really want to be slim，you can play sports regularly every day．【高分句型】（建議）I hope you will be a slim and healthy girl．（希望與祝愿）
Yours，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇給出材料提綱作文，題目中給出的材料較為簡(jiǎn)略，動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容組織語(yǔ)言，列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)，關(guān)鍵單詞等問(wèn)題．注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．