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BBC World Have Your Say："Life in China" Every day，BBC News on TV，radio and online brings you stories from across the world．But what we want to hear are the stories that matter to you． Have got a story about life in China today？If you do，please put your stories here．

I like travaling and I have traveled a lot around China．During the trip，I often find that a number of Chinese don't have good pulic manners（舉止）．They always loudly on the phone and smoke everywhere．The worst is that they often break the rules in public．For example，when I travled in HongKong in January this year，I saw a kid eating noodles on the underground，which is against the rules．However，the kid's mother didn't think he did wrong．Can you believe it？Let's improve our public manners．（Mike，Shenzhen）

I am a 14-year-old boy from a poor village in Fuyang，Anhui Province．Like many other left-behind children（留守兒童 ）in China，l live with my grandparents now．my father went to work in Shanghai several years ago．Last year，my mother went there to care for him because his health is not as good as before．They tell me to listen to my grandparents and call me about twice a month to ask about my study．I really miss my parents ans I hope I can afford to go to school in Shanghai．I think every child needs parents'love and care．（Wu Peigen，Anhui Province）

假如你是一名叫李明（Li Ming）的中學(xué)生，看了上述故事后，你想表達(dá)自己的看法． 請(qǐng)你給欄目編輯寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：
1．你對(duì)其中的哪個(gè)故事感興趣？原因是什么？
2．你對(duì)這個(gè)故事所提及的現(xiàn)象的看法．
3．就該現(xiàn)象提出至少兩條解決問(wèn)題的建議．
作文要求：
1．不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校真實(shí)的名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名．
2．語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右．作文開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)，也不必抄寫(xiě)在答題卡上．
Dear Editor，
I read the stories on BBC World Have Your Say today，
Iam interested in Mike's story，because I had the same experience when I traveled in Guangzhou．I can't stand bad
manners in public，either．In fact，I really get angry when people jump the queen
and smoke in non-smoking areas．I think it's wrong to break the rules in public．
In my opinion，we should know more about good manners．On the other hand，we had
better stop people around us from being rude．If we can't stop them，we can always
ask the police or someone like that for help．
Yours，
Li Ming
                                                                       Your，
                                                                       Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是看了上述故事后，給欄目組寫(xiě)封郵件表達(dá)一下自己的看法．注意郵件的格式，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．你對(duì)其中的哪個(gè)故事感興趣？原因是什么？
2．你對(duì)這個(gè)故事所提及的現(xiàn)象的看法．
3．就該現(xiàn)象提出至少兩條解決問(wèn)題的建議．
第一篇文章的大意是：英國(guó)的廣播公司每天都給你們帶來(lái)來(lái)自全世界的不同的故事，但是我們想聽(tīng)到的是關(guān)于你的故事？你有在中國(guó)生活的故事嗎？如果有，請(qǐng)將故事寫(xiě)在這．
第二篇文章的大意是：我喜歡旅游，旅行中我經(jīng)常發(fā)現(xiàn)許多中國(guó)人的行為舉止不夠好，他們經(jīng)常大聲講電話，四處抽煙，最遭的是他們不遵守規(guī)則，例如我在香港看見(jiàn)一個(gè)小男孩不遵守規(guī)則，但是他的媽媽認(rèn)為是對(duì)的，讓我們改善我們的舉止吧！
第三篇文章的大意是：我是來(lái)自于安徽阜陽(yáng)的一個(gè)窮山村的男孩，像其他的留守兒童一樣，我和我的爺爺奶奶一起住，爸爸在上海工作，去年我的媽媽也去上海照顧我的爸爸，他們讓我聽(tīng)爺爺奶奶的話并且一個(gè)月打兩次電話詢問(wèn)我的學(xué)習(xí)，我真的想我的爸爸媽媽，我希望我能去上海上學(xué)，我認(rèn)為每個(gè)小孩都希望有父母的關(guān)愛(ài)．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
be interested in 對(duì)…感興趣
can't stand 無(wú)法忍受
in fact事實(shí)上
on the other hand另一方面
had better do sth最好做某事
stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
【高分句型】
1．I ①am interested in Mike's story，②because I had the same experience③when I traveled in Guangzhou．
①be interested in 對(duì)…感興趣．
②because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句．
③when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
2．①On the other hand，we②had better③stop people ④around us from being rude．
①on the other hand另一方面．
②had better do sth最好做某事．
③stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
④around us介詞短語(yǔ)做后置定語(yǔ)，修飾people．

解答 Dear Editor，
I read the stories on BBC World Have Your Say today．I am interested in Mike's story，because I had the same experience when I traveled in Guangzhou．【高分句型】（你對(duì)其中的哪個(gè)故事感興趣？原因是什么）I can't stand bad manners in public，either．In fact，I really get angry when people jump the queen and smoke in non-smoking areas．I think it's wrong to break the rules in public．（你對(duì)這個(gè)故事所提及的現(xiàn)象的看法）In my opinion，we should know more about good manners．On the other hand，we had better stop people around us from being rude．【高分句型】If we can't stop them，we can always ask the police or someone like that for help．（解決問(wèn)題的建議）
Yours，
Li Ming

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文是一項(xiàng)能夠充分考查學(xué)生語(yǔ)言綜合運(yùn)用能力的題型．主要考查學(xué)生運(yùn)用已學(xué)的語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)和已掌握的英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作技能準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)客觀事實(shí)，闡述個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，進(jìn)行思想交流的書(shū)面表達(dá)能力．為了提高書(shū)面表達(dá)水平，平時(shí)應(yīng)加強(qiáng)閱讀，應(yīng)背誦一些句型、段落、甚至短文．只要讀得多，背得多，就能出口成章，下筆成文．此外，還要了解英文寫(xiě)作方面的基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)，掌握常用文體的寫(xiě)作方法．其實(shí)，用英文寫(xiě)信，記日記等都是學(xué)生力所能及且行之有效的練習(xí)寫(xiě)作的好方法．