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5．某英文報正在就"What is beauty in your mind？"這一話題進(jìn)行征文．請根據(jù)表格提供的信息和要求寫一篇短文向該報投稿．

外表美 good looking	有的人不滿意自己的外表，故而不惜重金去做手術(shù)
你的觀點(diǎn)	美真的可以人造嗎？如果這樣，…．
心靈美 spiritual beauty	真正美麗的人并不是有一副好的面孔，而是有一顆寬廣和善良的心
你的觀點(diǎn)	1）心靈美比外表美更為重要 2）…

要求：1）短文包括相關(guān)信息的介紹和你自己的觀點(diǎn)．
2）詞數(shù)：100．題目和開頭已為你寫好，不記入總詞數(shù)．
3）不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名或地名；
4）請將作文內(nèi)容寫在答題卡對應(yīng)的位置上．
參考詞匯：standard標(biāo)準(zhǔn)； unique 唯一的
What is beauty in your mind
Everyone admires beauty．Everyone has his own standard about beauty． Nowadays some people think that they own beauty if they have a good looking．They are not satisfied with their appearance．They spend much money taking a kind of operation．Can beauty really be man-made？If so，everybody can get beauty．As a result，there is no beauty at all．
Some people think that a really beautiful person is not the one with a good looking，but with a broad and kind heart．Good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important．If you have a kind heart，you own real beauty．
I think the appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world．Everyone should value it．Many heroes don't have beautiful surface．However，their beautiful images often come to our minds．Their beauty comes from their contributions to the society．
So don't judge whether a person is beautiful or not according to his or her appearance．
．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是以What is beauty in your mind？為題談?wù)勈裁词敲溃畷r態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．外表美；有的人不滿意自己的外表，故而不惜重金去做手術(shù)
2．心靈美：真正美麗的人并不是有一副好的面孔，而是有一顆寬廣和善良的心
3．我的觀點(diǎn)：美真的可以人造嗎？如果這樣…；心靈美比外表美更為重要…

常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
be satisfied with 對…滿足
spend 時間+doing sth 花時間做某事
come from 來自
according to  依據(jù)于…
【高分句型】
1．Nowadays some people think①that they own beauty②if they have a good looking．
①that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，作為think的賓語．
②if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句．
2．Can beauty really be man-made？If so，everybody can get beauty．
if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，so替代上文的beauty can really be man-made．
3．I think①the appearance②is given by our parents and is unique in the world．
①think后是省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語從句．
②一般現(xiàn)在時的被動語態(tài)am/is/are+過去分詞．

解答 Everyone admires beauty．Everyone has his own standard about beauty．
Nowadays some people think that they own beauty if they have a good looking．【高分句型】They are not satisfied with their appearance．They spend much money taking a kind of operation．（外表美；有的人不滿意自己的外表，故而不惜重金去做手術(shù)）Can beauty really be man-made？If so，everybody can get beauty．【高分句型】As a result，there is no beauty at all．（我的觀點(diǎn)：美真的可以人造嗎？）
Some people think that a really beautiful person is not the one with a good looking，but with a broad and kind heart．（真正美麗的人并不是有一副好的面孔，而是有一顆寬廣和善良的心）Good looking is pleasant while spiritual beauty is more important．If you have a kind heart，you own real beauty．  （心靈美比外表美更為重要）
I think the appearance is given by our parents and is unique in the world．【高分句型】Everyone should value it．Many heroes don't have beautiful surface．However，their beautiful images often come to our minds．Their beauty comes from their contributions to the society．
So don't judge whether a person is beautiful or not according to his or her appearance．（ 我的觀點(diǎn)）

點(diǎn)評 1．仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)．
2．提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．
3．根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；語言表達(dá)要符合英語習(xí)慣．