Question

【題目】學(xué)校�？�正舉行征文活動(dòng)，主題為“我第一次參加的運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)”。根據(jù)中英文提示，寫一篇意思連貫、符合邏輯、不少于50詞的英語(yǔ)短文。內(nèi)容要求：

1. 你參加了什么項(xiàng)目；

2. 成績(jī)?nèi)绾危?/span>

3. 有什么感受；

提示	1. What event did you take part in for the first time? 2. What was your result? 3. How did you feel?

提示詞語(yǔ)： long jump, win, feel, nervous and excited, sorry

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Answer 1

【答案】

In Grade 4, I took part in the sports meet for the first time. My event was the relay race. I was running the last lap. It was the final event on sports meet. Everyone was nervous but excited. All the runners got ready at the starting line.

As soon as the race began, everyone was too excited to stop cheering. When it was my turn, I thought the Class 4’s runner would catch up with me. So I tried my best to run faster though I was nervous. Finally, our class won the first prize in the most exciting event.

I was happy that we won the prize for my class. Of course, I was happy I was a part of them. This is my first time to take part in the sports meet and I think it’s the most unforgettable sports meet in my school life.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，主題為“我第一次參加的運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)”。動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；以提示的問(wèn)題作為寫作的主線，結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本文緊扣材料，要點(diǎn)完整，表達(dá)清晰流暢。文中用到了很多短語(yǔ)，如：take part in ,as soon as, catch up with, try one’s best to do等等。此外，句子之間用了一些連詞，使邏輯更緊密，如but，and, Of course,,等。另外時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用非常準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)意連貫，表達(dá)清楚，沒(méi)有任何語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。