Question

My Happiness

提示：幸福是什么？ 幸福是父母為你營(yíng)造的溫馨的家， 幸福是老師投向你的贊喜的目光，幸福是孤獨(dú)時(shí)朋友送來(lái)的一杯奶茶，幸福是…… 請(qǐng)以My Happiness 為題， 寫(xiě)一件曾經(jīng)發(fā)生過(guò)的令你感到幸福的事情。

    要求：1．請(qǐng)按提示用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文，詞數(shù)不少于60個(gè)；

              2．語(yǔ)言流暢、書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范、卷面整潔；

              3．文中不得使用你的真實(shí)姓名、校名，否則以零分計(jì)。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

My Happiness.

Happiness is important in our life. In fact , happiness is always around you if you put heart into it.

   I will never forget that day. That day, I had a bad mark at a math test. I was afraid to meet my parents. When I got back home late, my parents knew what happened, and they said to me, “ It doesn’t matter , my child. Remember we’ll be always beside you when you need help. We believe you can be better next time. Never give up!” I was moved and made up my mind to work harder.

  I feel happy. Whenever I am in trouble, I can feel my parents’ love. I want to be a good child for my parents.

【解析】

這事一篇命題作文，題目為My happiness 我的幸福。文章題材為記敘文，要寫(xiě)一件自己發(fā)生了的幸福事，所以要用第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意記敘文的幾大要素，把故事交代清楚，句子結(jié)構(gòu)要完整，注意動(dòng)詞的時(shí)態(tài)和主謂一致。

【亮點(diǎn)分析】

整篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，思路清晰，三段落結(jié)構(gòu)很明顯。文章中用了很多短語(yǔ)和句式，使表達(dá)更精準(zhǔn)生動(dòng)，例如：In fact, happiness is always around you if you put heart into it.事實(shí)上，只要你用心體會(huì)幸福一直在你身邊。Never give up! 永不放棄。I was moved and made up my mind to work harder.我感動(dòng)了并下定決心更努力學(xué)習(xí)。Whenever I am in trouble……不管我何時(shí)處在困難中，等等。