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【題目】書面表達(dá)（共1題，計(jì)15分）

請(qǐng)根據(jù)申請(qǐng)表內(nèi)容完成90詞左右的申請(qǐng)信

Name	Zhaoling	Date of birth	2000年10月20日
Tele. number	0519—82833988	Email	83445133@qq.com
School	No.6 Middle School	Grade	8
Favourite subjects	生物、英語(yǔ)	Interests and hobbies	收集各種動(dòng)物圖片、聽(tīng)音樂(lè)
Activities to protect wildlife		去年春天和朋友一起去扎龍自然保護(hù)區(qū)參加了保護(hù)鳥(niǎo)類的活動(dòng)。
reasons	喜愛(ài)大自然，對(duì)植物動(dòng)物感興趣， 想要更多的了解鳥(niǎo)，人們砍伐樹(shù)，鳥(niǎo)越來(lái)越少，想做些事情來(lái)保護(hù)鳥(niǎo)
Free time	每周六下午2點(diǎn)到5點(diǎn)

Dear chairperson,

I’d like to join the Birdingwatching Society.

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Yours sincerely,

Zhaoling

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear chairperson,

I’d like to join the Birdwatching Society. First, let me introduce myself. I am a Grade 8 student at No 6 Middle School. I was born on October 20,2000. I am very interested in learning about different birds. My favorite subjects are biology and English. I like collecting pictures of animals and listening to music. Last spring, I attended an activity in Zalong natural reserve with my friends. I think it is important for me to do something to protect the birds. I will be happy if I can become a member of you. I am free on Saturday afternoon from 2 to 5. You can call me at 0519-82833988 or email me at 83445133@qq.com.

Yours Sincerely,

Zhaoling

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們根據(jù)表格中給出的信息寫一篇申請(qǐng)信。通過(guò)審題可以看出，這張表格中有關(guān)于趙玲的詳細(xì)的信息，如姓名、出生年月、愛(ài)好、所在學(xué)校和班級(jí)、最喜歡的科目、參加過(guò)的活動(dòng)，申請(qǐng)的原因等。我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。短文中我們應(yīng)該把主體放在對(duì)自己情況的介紹上，主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，第一人稱來(lái)表達(dá)。由于表格中的信息較多，因此寫作時(shí)，我們要注意信息的處理，進(jìn)行重新規(guī)整，可以將順序打亂，以使短文的表達(dá)有條理，層次清楚。寫作時(shí)，我們要盡量使用好的短語(yǔ)和句型，使文章在內(nèi)容完整的基礎(chǔ)上，有更強(qiáng)的表現(xiàn)力，表達(dá)更加流暢。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，整篇短文內(nèi)容完整，層次清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。作者在短文中根據(jù)表格中的信息對(duì)自己進(jìn)行了介紹，并解釋了自己想要參加觀鳥(niǎo)協(xié)會(huì)的原因交代清楚，符合申請(qǐng)信寫作的要求。短文中作者也使用了一些比較好的句型和句式，如I am very interested in learning about different birds.；I like collecting pictures of animals and listening to music.、I think it is important for me to do something to protect the birds.、I will be happy if I can become a member of you.等。這些句型的使用為文章增色不少。