Question

4．現(xiàn)在，很多中學(xué)生被近視困擾，請就此現(xiàn)象寫一篇短文談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br />   內(nèi)容包括：1．造成近視的原因；
            2．近視對學(xué)習(xí)或生活的影響；
            3．你認為應(yīng)該如何保護視力？（至少兩條建議）
要求：1．字數(shù)80-100字．開頭已給出，不計入總字數(shù)．
     2．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的校名與人名．
參考詞匯：eyesight   n．視力              nearsighted  adj．近視的
       have good eyesight   視力好      have bad eyesight  視力差．

Answer 1

分析 本篇短文是要你談?wù)剬χ袑W(xué)生近視這一現(xiàn)象的看法，屬于議論文，在寫作的時候，以一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)為主，其中要點要包括：1．造成近視的原因．2．對生活和學(xué)習(xí)有什么影響．3．如何保護視力．寫作過程中可以把第一和第二個要點合在一塊分析，說完了一個原因，接著說近視的不方便之處，更自然．

解答 【參考范文一】
   Quite a lot of students have become nearsighted now．I think the main reason is that students don't have a good habit while studying．Bad eyesight brings trouble to our life and study．For example，if we leave our glasses at home，we can't take notes in class．We will feel uncomfortable when we swim with glasses．Here is my advice：on the one hand，teenagers shouldn't study for hours without breaks because our eyes need to relax．On the other hand，having sports and doing eye exercise are also helpful．
    It's very important to have good eyesight．So let's take good care of our eyes．

【參考范文二】
   Quite a lot of students have become nearsighted now．There are many reasons．Some students often play computer games for
long．Some keep their eyes too close to the books while reading and some often read in poor light．
   If we are nearsighted，you may lose some good chances for your dream jobs like pilots and policemen．So it's important to protect your eyes．First，you shouldn't play computer games or watch TV too much．Second，you'd better take  breaks after reading or doing homework for a long time．Third，you're supposed to do eye exercises regularly．If you can do like this，you will have a good eyesigt!

點評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達清楚的要點和細節(jié)．