Question

7．某中文網(wǎng)站提出"走路去上學(xué)"的提議，請你就這一話題寫一篇約80詞的英語短文．
要點(diǎn)如下：1）走路有利于健康且安全；
2）和同學(xué)結(jié)伴可以相互理解，相互幫助；
3）不需要父母接送，學(xué)會(huì)自理；
4）道路上車輛減少，城市不再擁堵；
要求：1）要點(diǎn)齊全，調(diào)理清楚，語句通順，語法正確，書寫規(guī)范；
2）文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的學(xué)校和姓名．
Walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise．I think it's good for health and it's safe．When we walk with our classmates，we can talk about something interesting and know each other better．Also，we can help each other．What's more，if we walk，our parents don't have to send us to school．We can learn to look after ourselves． As a result，there will be fewer cars in the city．Then the streets are no longer crowded．
I hope more and more students will go to school on foot．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是談?wù)?走路去上學(xué)"的益處．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1）走路有利于健康且安全；
2）和同學(xué)結(jié)伴可以相互理解，相互幫助；
3）不需要父母接送，學(xué)會(huì)自理；
4）道路上車輛減少，城市不再擁堵；

常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
be good for對…有利
each other彼此
no longer不再
what's more再者
【高分句型】
1．①What's more，②if we walk，our parents don't have to ③send us to school．
①what's more再者
②if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句．
③send sb to sp送某人去某地
2．I hope①②more and more students will go to school ③on foot．
①hope后是省略了that的賓語從句．
②比較級(jí)+and+比較級(jí)，表示越來越…
③on foot步行

解答 Walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise． I think it's good for health and it's safe．（走路有利于健康且安全）When we walk with our classmates，we can talk about something interesting and know each other better．Also，we can help each other．（和同學(xué)結(jié)伴可以相互理解，相互幫助）What's more，if we walk，our parents don't have to send us to school．【高分句型】We can learn to look after ourselves．（不需要父母接送，學(xué)會(huì)自理） As a result，there will be fewer cars in the city．Then the streets are no longer crowded．（道路上車輛減少，城市不再擁堵）
I hope more and more students will go to school on foot．【高分句型】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 對待此類提綱作文，尤其是文字材料的提綱，切記要逐句翻譯，寫作前，首先要理清思路，然后選用合適的詞或短語，讓文意更通順，例如本文可以用到Also，What's more．等短語和句型，讓文章有過渡，有條理．