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1．"傳遞愛心，服務(wù)他人"是文明社會(huì)所倡導(dǎo)的理念．獅子會(huì)（the Lions）就是一個(gè)以此為宗旨的國際性服務(wù)團(tuán)體．楊敏是獅子會(huì)的一名成員，多年來她一直樂于助人．請根據(jù)提示用英語寫一篇短文，向�？�的English World欄目投稿，簡要介紹楊敏的事跡，然后談?wù)勀愕挠^點(diǎn)和打算．

	Ready to help others
	Yang Min Help others for years Go to the old people's home twice a month （cut hair，wash clothes，do some cleaning ） Offer people umbrellas or raincoats on rainy days
	Your  opinion… Your  plan…

要求：
1．短文內(nèi)容必須包含表格所提供的要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名、校名及地名；
3．詞數(shù)：80-100（短文開頭已給出，僅供選擇使用，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）．
短文開頭：From time to time，we are moved by the people and things around us．YangMin is one of the persons I admire most．
As a member of the Lions，she has been helping others for many years．She goes to the old people's home twice a month to cut hair，wash clthes and do some cleaning for them．Besides，on rainy days she offers people umbrellas or raincoats for free．
I'm deeply moved by her story．I'm going to start with small things around me．I plan to give books and colthes to children in poor villages．What's more，I'll ask my parents and more friends to join me．
Small action can make a big difference．Let's help those who need help．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是簡要介紹楊敏的事跡，然后談?wù)勀愕挠^點(diǎn)和打算．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1簡要介紹楊敏的事跡：幫助他人很多年，一個(gè)月去養(yǎng)老院一次，雨天免費(fèi)提供雨傘或雨衣
2你的觀點(diǎn)和打算．

常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
offer sb sth 給某人提供某物
start with 以…開始
what's more 再者
join sb 和某人一起
make a difference 有影響
【高分句型】
1．①What's more，I'll ②ask my parents and more friends to join me．
①what's more 再者
②ask sb to do sth 讓某人做某事；join sb 和某人一起

2．Small action can make a big difference．
make a big difference有很大的影響
3．①Let's help those ②who need help!
①let's do sth 表示提出建議．
②who作為關(guān)系詞的定語從句，who 作為從句的主語，修飾先行詞those．

解答 From time to time，we are moved by the people and things around us．YangMin is one of the persons I admire most．
As a member of the Lions，she has been helping others for many years．She goes to the old people's home twice a month to cut hair，wash clthes and do some cleaning for them．Besides，on rainy days she offers people umbrellas or raincoats for free．（介紹楊敏的事跡）
I'm deeply moved by her story．I'm going to start with small things around me．I plan to give books and clothes to children in poor villages．What's more，I'll ask my parents and more friends to join me．【高分句型】
Small action can make a big difference【高分句型】．Let's help those who need help!【高分句型】（你的觀點(diǎn)和打算）

點(diǎn)評 考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心．注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)．運(yùn)用適當(dāng)?shù)亩陶Z表達(dá)中心思想，增加作文的可讀性．完成提示詞時(shí)也要符合事實(shí)．溫馨提醒：考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等．這篇短文使用了一些固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少．學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理．