Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

學(xué)校英語校報(bào)開辟專欄討論學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)生活，Helen想要投稿參與討論。假如你是Helen, 請根據(jù)表格所給提示，并作合理發(fā)揮，寫一篇80詞左右的英語短文。

提示詞：垃圾食品 junk food

注意：

1. 表達(dá)中必須包含所給要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。

2. 表達(dá)中請勿提及真實(shí)校名及姓名。詞數(shù)90左右。

Problems	1.常常熬夜，感覺很疲勞，壓力大
	2.經(jīng)常感冒，感到虛弱
	3.和父母不時有爭執(zhí)
	4.……（自擬兩點(diǎn)）
Suggestions	1.步行或騎車上學(xué)，每天鍛煉一小時
	2.拒絕垃圾食品，多吃蔬菜和水果
	3. 制定學(xué)習(xí)計(jì)劃，10點(diǎn)前上床睡覺
	4.……（自擬兩點(diǎn)）

As teenagers, we face many chances, but also have problems. Sometimes we wonder when to study and when to play. Some of us____________________________________________

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I think it’s important to have a healthy life style. We should

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Answer 1

【答案】

As teenagers, we face many chances, but also have problems. Sometimes we wonder when to study and when to play. Some of us often stay up too late. So we will feel tired and pressed the next day. Our bodies are too weak and easy to catch a cold. Others often argue with their parents. Some students spend too much time playing computer games. And there are other students who can’t concentrate their attention on their studies.

I think it is important to have a healthy life style. We should exercise at least one hour every day. For example, we can go to school by bike or on foot. We must eat more fruits and vegetables, and eat less junk food. Also, we should go to bed before 10 pm. We can make a study plan. What’s more, we should make more friends and share our happiness or sadness with them. During holidays, we can go out to travel to make ourselves relaxed.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們根據(jù)表格中給出的信息，給學(xué)校的英語校報(bào)寫一篇文章，討論學(xué)生們的學(xué)習(xí)生活。在學(xué)生們的學(xué)習(xí)生活中存在著很多問題，如熬夜不睡覺、壓力大、身體弱、與父母不能及時溝通等。我們要對這些問題提出自己的建議。因此這篇短文中應(yīng)主要包括兩個方面的內(nèi)容，一是列舉學(xué)生中存在的問題；二是給出自己的建議。需要注意的是，在這兩方面的內(nèi)容中，都需要我們自己補(bǔ)充兩點(diǎn)，這是需要我們發(fā)揮想象力，結(jié)合自己的實(shí)際情況來補(bǔ)充的。要注意符合整篇短文的內(nèi)容，不要跑題。這篇作文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第一人稱。寫作時，要注意使用符合英語表達(dá)規(guī)范的句子，還有盡量使用我們學(xué)過的，平時積累的句型和短語，使文章表達(dá)流暢，意思清楚。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者按照題目的要求，針對現(xiàn)在學(xué)生們中間存在的問題做了敘述，還給出了自己的建議。短文作者分成了兩段，第一段列舉了學(xué)生們生活中存在的一些問題，除了題目中給出的三點(diǎn)，作者還自己補(bǔ)充了兩點(diǎn)。第二段作者提出了自己的建議。這樣的分段來寫，使文章層次非常清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)很清楚。而且作者自行補(bǔ)充的內(nèi)容也都符合整篇文章的內(nèi)容，跟整篇短文能夠一致起來。作文中作者還使用了比較多的好的短語和句型，如Some of us often stay up too late. So we will feel tired and pressed the next day、Some students spend too much time playing computer games. 、And there are other students who can’t concentrate their attention on their studies、What’s more, we should make more friends and share our happiness or sadness with them等。