Question

【題目】寫作

目前，我們的孩子面臨著許多危險(xiǎn)。這些危險(xiǎn)讓我們的父母很擔(dān)心。作為一名學(xué)生，請你根據(jù)以下信息，給某英文報(bào)寫一篇短文，就青少年的安全問題談?wù)勀愕目捶ê徒ㄗh。

現(xiàn)狀	1. 校車事故多次發(fā)生，許多孩子喪生。 2. 市場上到處可見不安全的食品，危害孩子的健康。 3. 網(wǎng)上不健康的網(wǎng)站，對青少年有不良影響。 4. ……
建議	1. 制定新的校車規(guī)則來保證孩子的安全 2. 注重食品安全，不吃不安全的食品，同時(shí)阻止廠家生產(chǎn)這樣的食品。 3. …… 4. ……

要求：

1）表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2）要點(diǎn)必須包括所有相關(guān)信息，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不得使用真實(shí)姓名和校名等；

3）詞數(shù)：100詞左右（文章開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不記入總詞數(shù)）；

4）建議措施不少于兩點(diǎn)。

Nowadays, many parents are worrying about their children’s safety.

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If we do so, the children in our country will be safer.

Answer 1

【答案】

Nowadays, many parents often worry about their children because of the safety problems. For example, the school bus accidents have taken place many times. Many children were killed. The unsafe food in the market can be seen everywhere. It is harmful to the children’s health. What’ s more, the bad websites on the Internet are bad for the children .

In order to protect the children, we should make new schoolbus rules to protect the safety of the children. Don’t allow anyone to produce any unsafe food. We mustn’t sell or buy such unsafe food, and we should stay away from the bad websites.

If we do so, the children in our country will be safer.

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文為話題類作文，要求根據(jù)表格內(nèi)信息，給某英文報(bào)寫一篇短文，就青少年的安全問題談?wù)勀愕目捶ê徒ㄗh。寫作要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)列出，要求明確，故要完成寫作任務(wù)，務(wù)必把各要點(diǎn)表達(dá)清楚。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本篇范文成功地完成了寫作任務(wù)，要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。本文應(yīng)用了很多短語使得文章很生動(dòng)，例如For example, the school bus accidents have taken place many times. What’ s more, the bad websites on the Internet are bad for the children . We mustn’t sell or buy such unsafe food, and we should stay away from the bad websites.被動(dòng)語態(tài)Many children were killed.的應(yīng)用更使得短文表述更準(zhǔn)確�？傊�，該文是一篇不錯(cuò)的短文。