Question

17．在陽光雨露里，我已長高、長壯，但這還不是全部，長大還應包括什么？是關(guān)心、幫助同學？是體貼、理解父母？是感恩、回報親朋師長？還是…，成長的點點滴滴，久久不能忘記．請以I Am Not a Child Any More為題，記敘你在學習生活中經(jīng)歷的一件或兩件事，表明你已經(jīng)不再是一個下孩子．
要求：
1．請根據(jù)所給題目，用英語寫一篇短文，不少于80詞；
2．語言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔；
3．文中不得使用你的真實姓名、校名，否則以零分計算
I am not a child any more
I have changed a lot during the past three years．I used to be weak and short．But now，I am strong and as tall as my father．The most important thing is that I have learned to care about others．
It was a Wednesday evening．When I went back home，no one was in．So I cooked the meal．I didn't know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital．They both said the meal was very delicious，although it tasted salty．At bedtime，I fetched hot water for my mother to wash feet．My mother said，"Dear，you are really grown up．"
It was the first time that I had realized I was not a child any more．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以I Am Not a Child Any More為題，記敘你在學習生活中經(jīng)歷的一件或兩件事，表明你已經(jīng)不再是一個下孩子．時態(tài)主要為一般過去時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從兩個大的方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．我的改變．
2．生活中經(jīng)歷的一件事
常用到的重點短語：
used to do sth 過去常常
as…as一樣…
care about關(guān)心
grow up長大
高分句型：
I didn't know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital．（高分句型）
本句是一個主從復合句，know后加的賓語從句，其中not…until直達…才，引導的時間狀語從句．
They both said the meal was very delicious，although it tasted salty．（高分句型）
although引導的讓步狀語從句，表示雖然，其中主句還是一個含有賓語從句the meal was very delicious的復合句

解答 I am not a child any more
I have changed a lot during the past three years．I used to be weak and short．But now，I am strong and as tall as my father．The most important thing is that I have learned to care about others．（我的改變）
 It was a Wednesday evening．When I went back home，no one was in．So I cooked the meal．I didn't know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital．（高分句型）They both said the meal was very delicious，although it tasted salty．（高分句型）At bedtime，I fetched hot water for my mother to wash feet．My mother said，"Dear，you are really grown up．"（經(jīng)歷的一件事）
It was the first time that I had realized I was not a child any more．

點評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達清楚的要點和細節(jié)．