Question

5．上周末你帶了個外國朋友游覽了梅園（Wuxi Plum Garden）．請根據(jù)要點(diǎn)寫一篇短文．
1．梅園是無錫最著名的名勝之一，每天吸引大量游客來賞景；
2．幾年前，有些游客無視保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性；
3．如今發(fā)生了巨大的變化，游客們再也不…；
4．將全身心投入學(xué)習(xí)，將來把無錫建成最適合人居的地方．
注意：1．第3要點(diǎn)的內(nèi)容須用3-4句話展開合理想象，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．詞數(shù)80個左右．
Last weekend，I showed a foreign friend around Wuxi Plum Garden．It is one of themost famous places of interest in Wuxi．Every day a large number of tourists are attracted here to enjoyits beauty．Years ago，some tourists paid no attention to the importance ofprotecting the environment．Now great changes have taken place．Tourists don't litter about any more．They don't walk on grass．They don't pick up the flowers．They don't destroy the things in the game．I willput all my effort into my study and make Wuxithe most suitable place to live．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是介紹無錫梅園．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．梅園是無錫最著名的名勝之一，每天吸引大量游客來賞景；
2．幾年前，有些游客無視保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性；
3．如今發(fā)生了巨大的變化，游客們再也不…；（此要點(diǎn)的內(nèi)容須用3-4句話展開合理想象，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮）
4．將全身心投入學(xué)習(xí)，將來把無錫建成最適合人居的地方．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
places of interest名勝
pay attention to 留意
take place 發(fā)生
not…any more不再

【高分句型】
1．It is①one of the most famous ②places of interest in Wuxi．
①one of+最高級+名詞復(fù)數(shù)，表示最怎么樣的…之一
②places of interest名勝
2．I will①put all my effort into my study and make Wuxithe most suitable place ②to live．
①put all one's effort into 全身心投入
②動詞不定式做后置定語，修飾place．

解答 Onepossible version：
Last weekend，I showed a foreign friend around Wuxi Plum Garden．It is one of the most famous places of interest in Wuxi．【高分句型】Every day a large number of tourists are attracted here to enjoy its beauty．（梅園是無錫最著名的名勝之一，每天吸引大量游客來賞景）Years ago，some tourists paid no attention to the importance of protecting the environment．（幾年前，有些游客無視保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性）Now great changes have taken place．Tourists don't litter about any more．They don't walk on grass．They don't pick up the flowers．They don't destroy the things in the game．（如今發(fā)生了巨大的變化）I will put all my effort into my study and make Wuxithe most suitable place to live．【高分句型】（將全身心投入學(xué)習(xí)，將來把無錫建成最適合人居的地方）

點(diǎn)評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點(diǎn)．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．