Question

假設(shè)你是新華中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，進入高三后你的朋友William感到壓力很大，學(xué)習(xí)效果甚微，請你給他寫一封電子郵件，幫助他放松身心，提高學(xué)習(xí)效率。

內(nèi)容要點：

1. 快樂學(xué)習(xí)，保持愉快的心情；

2. 積極參加體育活動，聽聽歌曲音樂；

3. 多與同學(xué)交流，互相鼓勵。

注意：

1. 開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫好,詞數(shù)100詞左右。

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear William,

Recently, I have heard that you feel stressed as a student of Senior Three.

 

 

 

 

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Dear William,

Recently, I have heard that you feel stressed as a student of Senior Three. Here is some advice on how to study effectively.

First of all, learn in a relaxing way. This will remove our pressure, making study an easy job. Another way to keep up our spirits is to take part in sports. Not only does exercise build up the body, but also it provides us time to relax and fresh our mind, making us memorize things faster and longer. Music, too, is another effective means of refreshing and helping us concentrate better.

Last but not least, we should exchange ideas with our classmates. Through the communication we can find support, which will encourge us to overcome difficulties in our study.

Hope these can benefit you.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

 

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達要求以李華的名義給朋友William寫一封電子郵件，幫助他放松身心，提高學(xué)習(xí)效率。給出的要點有1. 快樂學(xué)習(xí)，保持愉快的心情；2. 積極參加體育活動，聽聽歌曲音樂；3. 多與同學(xué)交流，互相鼓勵。這三個要點的順序可以根據(jù)需要進行調(diào)整，而且在寫作時也可以發(fā)揮想象，增添內(nèi)容，使文章更加豐滿，但要注意分清主次。因為是給別人寫郵件提建議，所以注意語言要禮貌，措辭要委婉，而且不要用生僻的詞匯。此外，為了增加文章亮點，提高作文的檔次，要盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，如倒裝句，強調(diào)句和各種從句等。

【亮點說明】本篇范文語言通順流暢，內(nèi)容表述得體。在文章首段作者開門見山提出寫信的目的，通過 Here is some advice on how to study effectively引出三個要點內(nèi)容，起到了很好的過渡作用.。在講述三個要點時作者使用了First of all, Last but not least, not only…..but also等連接詞使文章具有很強的層次性。分詞短語making study an easy job.介詞短語Through the communication，定語從句which will encourge us to overcome difficulties in our study.等充分顯示了作者對語言句式靈活運用的能力。

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