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【題目】書面表達(dá)

假如你是李華，請你根據(jù)以“老人摔倒你會扶嗎?”為主題的班會調(diào)查結(jié)果及你自己的意見給《英語周報(bào)》寫一篇演講稿，要點(diǎn)如下：

注意：

1．總詞數(shù)不少于100；

2．開頭部分已寫好，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)；

3．不能使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

Ladies and gentlemen,

Will you help the old when they fall down on the street? A recent survey from our class meeting shows that

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Answer 1

【答案】

Ladies and gentlemen,

Will you help the old when they fall down on the street? A recent survey from our class meeting shows that eight percent of the students think they are sure to help the old who fall on the street because saving life is the first thing. Fifteen percent of the students say whether they help or not depends on the circumstances. However, five percent of them hold the view that the old shouldn’t be helped. Why not? First, they lack the knowledge of first aid, not knowing how to deal with the situation. Second, they are afraid of getting into trouble.

In my opinion, we should help each other, especially the old people. To respect the old is our best traditions. Everyone will become old, and if such a case occurs to us one day, I will say I need your help. Thank you!

【解析】

試題分析：本文屬于提綱短文，話題為：“老人摔倒你會扶嗎？”同時(shí)這也是一篇議論文，使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。要點(diǎn)：1.部分同學(xué)認(rèn)為應(yīng)該去扶，因?yàn)榫人婪鰝�是中華美德。2.部分人認(rèn)為不能扶，因?yàn)槲覀內(nèi)狈�急救知識，反而會帶來更大的問題。而且有些人因?yàn)榉鋈硕�被額訛詐。3.個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)：應(yīng)該去扶摔倒的老人。首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語來提升整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文的亮點(diǎn)在于連接詞的使用，讓整個(gè)文章成為了一個(gè)有機(jī)的整體。如However、Why not? First、Second、In my opinion 等等；同時(shí)句中還有一些高級的句式，如such a case occurs to us one day when we’re old中的定語從句when we’re old，F(xiàn)ifteen percent of the students say whether they help or not depends on the circumstances.賓語從句，five percent of them hold the view that the old shouldn’t be helped同位語從句。在以后的寫作中一定要注意這些技巧的使用。