Question

假如你是李華，你代表你們班同學(xué)給你們學(xué)校新來的外籍教師Mr. Smith寫一封電子郵件，告訴他大家對(duì)他第一周教學(xué)的感受，內(nèi)容包括：

1、大家對(duì)他的總體評(píng)價(jià)較高；

2、具有獨(dú)特的、使課堂生動(dòng)活潑的方法；

3、知識(shí)淵博，且對(duì)學(xué)生很耐心；

4、就如何幫助英語基礎(chǔ)薄弱的學(xué)生，向他提一些建議（內(nèi)容自擬）。

注意：1.電子郵件必須包括以上內(nèi)容，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)；

2. 詞數(shù)110左右（開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。

Dear Mr. Smith，

On behalf of the students of our class, I email you telling you how we feel about your first-week teaching in our class.

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Smith,

On behalf of the students of our class, I e-mail you telling you how we feel about your first-week teaching in our class. All of us students think highly of your way of teaching, as you can always make your class lively and interesting. In addition, you are such a learned man that we can learn a lot from you and most important of all, you are patient with us. Frankly, you have built up our confidence in learning English well.

Some of us are still poor at English and need your help. We hope you will speak a little bit slowly so that we can understand you better. Besides, would you please spend more time with us, joining in our after school activities so that we have more chances to practice our oral English?

If you have any difficulties in your life here, just tell us. We are ready to offer you any help.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，給外教反應(yīng)一周以來的感受，使用第一人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。要點(diǎn)文章都已經(jīng)給了出來，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來.本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體,故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá).寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】高級(jí)詞匯的運(yùn)用是本文最大的亮點(diǎn)：介詞短語On behalf of 代表…；think highly of高度評(píng)價(jià)….；In addition而且；Frankly坦率地說；built up our confidence建立自信等等；在寫作的時(shí)候，我們要選擇合適的和文章內(nèi)容相一致的高級(jí)詞匯讓我們的文章更有層次感。

考點(diǎn)：考察提綱來短文寫作