Question

1．假如你叫王宇，明年六月份將從晨曦中學畢業(yè)，打算到耶魯大學（Yale University）上學．現(xiàn)在請你根據(jù)下表的個人信息，用英語寫一封信，申請留學并索要申請材料．

姓名：王宇	性別：男	出生年月：2000年5月
畢業(yè)學校：晨曦中學	學業(yè)：各門功課優(yōu)秀
申請院校：耶魯大學	申請專業(yè)：財務(wù)管理（financial management）
興趣愛好：書法（calligraphy）、英語和籃球	電子郵箱：wangyu05@sina．com

注意：1．信件必須包括以上內(nèi)容，不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；
2．詞數(shù)：100個左右．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Sir or Madam
I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in financial management in your university．First，please allow me to make a brief introduction of myself．I'm Wang Yu，a boy born in May，2000．I'm graduating from the Chen Xi Middle School next June．I'm an all-A student with a keen interest in calligraphy and playing basketball．（高分句型一）Besides，I'm good at English．I know that The Yale University is ranked among the most famous universities in the USA，and that's the very reason why I'm now applying to further my university study in your Financial Management Department．（高分句型二）
I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and send me the necessary application materials．（高分句型三）By the way，my email address is wangyu05@sina．com．
Looking forward to your reply．
Your sincerely，
Wang Yu．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇書信體裁的書面表達，要注意以下幾點：1、注意書信的格式，而且書信的語言要簡潔明了，開門見山提出寫信的目的．2、題目要求很詳細，注意不要遺漏表格中的信息，同時題文就是文章的寫作目的．3、寫信時語言要自然流暢，禮貌委婉，在內(nèi)容方面可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫，4、為了提高檔次還要注意句式的變換．
【亮點說明】本篇書面表達格式正確，作者第一句話就開門見山的提出了自己寫信的目的，文章全面涵蓋了所有要點，語言簡潔明了、自然流暢．運用了許多句式，如I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance 是in the hope that的從句，I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information運用了I would appreciate it if…的句式．詞匯的運用也恰當合理，如further my study中的further是運用為動詞，make a brief introduction簡單介紹，an all-A student三好學生，a keen interest in熱切的興趣，have a good command of 對…有良好的掌握，rich experience豐富的經(jīng)歷．同時，一些連接詞和短語如First，By the way，的使用也使文章更有條理性，銜接更加順暢．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
       I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in Financial Management in your university．
       First，please allow me to make a brief introduction of myself．I'm Wang Yu，a boy born in May，1994．I'm graduating from the Chen Xi Middle School next June．I'm an all-A student with a keen interest in calligraphy and playing basketball．（高分句型一）Besides，I'm good at English．I know that The Yale University is ranked among the most famous universities in the USA，and that's the very reason why I'm now applying to further my university study in your Financial Management Department．（高分句型二）
       I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and send me the necessary application materials．（高分句型三）By the way，my email address is wangyu05@sina．com．
       Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                         Wang Yu

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．