Question

【題目】在現(xiàn)代社會中，電腦給人們的生活、學(xué)習(xí)和工作各個方面帶來了極大的便利，但是同時也帶來了很大的負面影響；①削弱想象力和創(chuàng)造力，②降低書寫、拼寫和閱讀技能，③電腦輻射(radiation)對人體有害。

請你以“Negative Effects of Computer”為題寫一篇英語短文。注意：①詞數(shù)100左右，②文中不得透漏個人姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

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Answer 1

【答案】Negative Effects of Computer

Nowadays, with the rapid development of modern science and technology, the computer has become more and more important to us. There is no doubt that it has brought us a lot of convenience in our work and life.

However, every coin has two sides. The negative effects of using computers are also obvious. The computer is not only weakening our imagination and creativity, but it is also damaging our spelling and reading abilities. Besides, the computer radiation is doing harm to our health.

Therefore, we should use the computer properly. If we can do without the computer, it is suggested that we should try to avoid in front of the computer.

【解析】1、審題：審題是做到切題的第一步。所謂審題就是要看清題意，確定文章的中心思想、主題，并圍繞中心思想組織材料。比如本作文的中心思想是電腦的負面影響。

以下的寫作都要圍繞這個中心思想組織材料。

2、進行構(gòu)思，列出簡單的提綱，打造文章之骨架：審好題、立好意后，就要寫提綱，打造文章的骨架。文章布局要做好幾件事：安排好層次段落，鋪設(shè)好過渡，處理好開頭和結(jié)尾。本作文的簡單提綱就是：①電腦給人們的生活、學(xué)習(xí)和工作帶來的便利；②電腦的危害，就是題文所給的三點危害；③總結(jié)全文，指出人們應(yīng)該善用電腦。

3、用好連接詞，注意段落間、句子間的連貫性。要做到所寫文章層次分明，思路清晰，文字連貫，就需要在句與句之間、段與段之間架起一座座橋梁，而連接詞起的正是橋梁作用。

在擴展的過程中要注意：

1）在整篇文章中，避免只是用一兩個句式或重復(fù)用同一詞語。英語中存在著極為豐富的同義詞，準確地使用同義詞可以給讀者清新的感覺。同時要靈活運用各種句式，如倒裝句、強調(diào)句、省略句、主從復(fù)合句、對比句、分詞短語、介詞短語等，從而增加文章的可讀性

2）使用不同長度的句子。通過分句和合句，增強句子的連貫性和表現(xiàn)力。

3）學(xué)會使用過渡詞。

（1) 遞進furthermore，moreover，besides，in addition，then，et

（2) 轉(zhuǎn)折however，but，nevertheless，afterwards，etc

（3) 總結(jié)finally，at last，in brief，to conclude，etc

（4) 強調(diào)really，indeed，certainly，surely，above a11，etc

（5) 對比in the same way，just as，on the other hand，etc

【亮點】

本篇作文層次分明，過渡自然。結(jié)構(gòu)完整，句子連貫。使用了復(fù)雜句，并列句，同位語從句及其他的固定句式，增強了句子的連續(xù)性和表現(xiàn)力。使用了一些過渡詞讓文章一氣呵成。文章中使用了一些固定的短語及句式，使文章更加生動。

同位語從句：There is no doubt that it has brought us a lot of convenience in our work and life.

并列句：The computer is not only weakening our imagination and creativity, but it is also damaging our spelling and reading abilities.

復(fù)雜句：If we can do without the computer, it is suggested that we should try to avoid in front of the computer

使用固定句式：every coin has two sides.

the computer has become more and more important to us.

固定的詞組：with the rapid development of modern science and technology；do harm to。

使用一些連詞。如However,…Besides, …Therefore,…。