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8．假如你叫李華，你的美國(guó)朋友Peter想了解目前你校中學(xué)生吸煙的問(wèn)題，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面給的要點(diǎn)提示，以smoking為話題，寫(xiě)一篇短文．
1．大部分中學(xué)生認(rèn)為吸煙很酷
2．吸煙有害健康，特別對(duì)是對(duì)肺的傷害，能導(dǎo)致很多疾�。�
3．為了自己和他人的健康，請(qǐng)戒煙
注意：
1．字?jǐn)?shù)：100 左右；2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
There are many students smoking in senior high school．The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）But there are a lot of reasons not to smoke．Smoking does harm to our health．It is dangerous to our heart and lung．A lot of diseases are caused by cigarettes．Cigarettes also have terrible smell．The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）Therefore，no smoking in public is a strict regulation in many countries．And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）So，we must keep far from the cigarette--for everybody's health．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息你的美國(guó)朋友Peter想了解目前你校中學(xué)生吸煙的問(wèn)題，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面給的要點(diǎn)提示，以smoking為話題，寫(xiě)一篇短文，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：大部分中學(xué)生認(rèn)為吸煙很酷；吸煙有害健康，特別對(duì)是對(duì)肺的傷害，能導(dǎo)致很多疾��；為了自己和他人的健康，請(qǐng)戒煙    2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：do harm to 對(duì)…有害；Therefore因此；get rid of擺脫，祛除；keep far from遠(yuǎn)離；in public在公共場(chǎng)所
 The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）
The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）
And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）

解答 There are many students smoking in senior high school．The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）But there are a lot of reasons not to smoke．Smoking does harm to our health．It is dangerous to our heart and lung．A lot of diseases are caused by cigarettes．Cigarettes also have terrible smell．The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）Therefore，no smoking in public is a strict regulation in many countries．And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）So，we must keep far from the cigarette--for everybody's health．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．