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7．It's always emotional when a sports superstar announces his or her retirement．And when Kobe Bryant，37，wrote a poem called Dear Basketball to say goodbye to one of the greatest，most fascinating careers in NBA history，the sadness was overwhelming．
Whether competing in the Finals or making jump shots after midnight in an empty gym，he has an unconditional love for the game．When Team USA was training in Las Vegas months before it headed to London for the 2012Olympic Games，Bryant started his workout at 5：30every morning in the gym until team practice began at 11：00am．During each practice Bryant counted every single shot he hit，and he wouldn't leave the gym until he had hit at least 400．
This kind of hard work certainly paid off．He won an NBA MVP award，five NBA championships with the Lakers and two Olympic gold medals，making him one of the greatest players in NBA history．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1．用約30個(gè)詞寫出上文概要；
2．用約120個(gè)詞發(fā)表你的觀點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容包括：
（1）你對(duì)"成功源于堅(jiān)持不懈的努力"的看法；
（2）用事例說明你或你朋友是怎么努力的．
【寫作要求】
1．闡述觀點(diǎn)或提供論據(jù)時(shí)，不得直接引用原文語句；
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．

Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個(gè)步驟：1． 認(rèn)真審題，找準(zhǔn)提示語中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3． 準(zhǔn)確定位人稱、時(shí)態(tài)．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
高分句型一：
Nevertheless，with my English teacher's patient instruction and help，I kept on practicing．In the end，my perseverance and determination paid off
盡管如此，在我的英語老師的耐心指導(dǎo)和幫助下，我堅(jiān)持練習(xí)，最后，我的毅力和決心得到了回報(bào)．
高分句型二：
If we are determined to do something，we will find a way of doing it and achieve success．Without perseverance，it is impossible for us to keep trying until our dreams come true．
如果我們下定決心去做某件事，我們就會(huì)找到一條成功之路，沒有毅力，我們就不可能繼續(xù)努力直到夢(mèng)想成真．

解答 The passage above tells us that people generally feel sad at Kobe Bryant's retirement and that his success results from his love for basketball and years of hard work．
Kobe's example reminds me that one's success is based on both passion and hard work．Besides Kobe，other people such as Thomas Edison，Steve Jobs and so on have all proven that perfectly．
When I was a child，I was faced with great difficulty in learning English，especially in vocabulary．Nevertheless，with my English teacher's patient instruction and help，I kept on practicing．In the end，my perseverance and determination paid off（高分句型一）．
"Where there is a will，there is a way"，as the old saying goes．If we are determined to do something，we will find a way of doing it and achieve success．Without perseverance，it is impossible for us to keep trying until our dreams come true（高分句型二）．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 開放性作文給出一定的寫作主題，并此為基礎(chǔ)進(jìn)行思維和聯(lián)想，自由發(fā)揮．不僅考查學(xué)生在內(nèi)容、結(jié)構(gòu)安排、語言運(yùn)用和組織方面的能力，而且對(duì)學(xué)生的想像力、發(fā)散思維、歸納判斷能力也有很高的要求．